Davy Crockett (Servant Archer)

[Davy Crockett]

ARCHER

"Let your tongue speak what your heart thinks."

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OTHER ALIAS: // DAVY CROCKETT, KING OF THE WILD FRONTIER[/color]
CURRENT AGE: // Appears to be late 20s[/color]
YEAR OF BIRTH: // 1786[/color]
GENDER: // Male[/color]
ALIGNMENT: // Chaotic Good[/color]
OCCUPATION: // Pioneer, Soldier, Trapper, Explorer, State Assembly man, Congressman, Musician[/color]
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HEIGHT: // 6'6”

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WEIGHT: // 210 lbs[/color]
EYE COLOR: // Golden Brown[/color]
HAIR COLOR: // Dark Brown[/color]
PIERCINGS: // None[/color]
TATTOOS: // None[/color]
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES: // THE SCAR ON HIS CHEEK, HIS HUNTING SUIT AND COON SKIN HAT, AND THE TENNESSEE DRAWL HE SPEAKS IN.[/color]
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• DETERMINED
  
  • ONCE HE HAS A GOAL, CROCKETT WILL LET NOTHING STOP HIM FROM FUFILLING IT
  
  
• HAPPY GO LUCKY
  
  • CROCKETT WILL PUT ANY AND ALL OF HIS SKILLS TO THE TEST, FROM GAMBLING TO FENCING
  
  
• RESTLESS
  
  • CROCKETT MUST ALWAYS HAVE A TASK, GOAL, OR ACTIVITY TO KEEP HIM BUSY. IF LEFT WITHOUT ONE, HE HAS A TENDENCY TO BECOME IMPATIENT AND START LOOKING FOR A FIGHT
  
  
• FAIR
  
  • CROCKETT ACTS AS A GOOD MODERATOR BETWEEN FOLK WHO DISLIKE EACH OTHER, LISTENING TO BOTH SIDES OF AN ISSUE AND FINDING A COMPROMISE
  
  
• BIG EATER
  
  • CROCKETT WILL EAT ALMOST ANYTHING
  
  

LIKES: // HUNTING, FIGHTING, SHOOTING, TRAPPING, EXPLORING, LEADING, SERVING AMERICA

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DISLIKES: // MEXICANS, QUITTERS, PEOPLE WHO ENSLAVE OTHER FOLK[/color]
STRENGTHS: // EXCELLENT SHOT, PROFFICIENT IN UNARMED HAND TO HAND COMBAT, AS WELL AS THROWING KNIVES AND TOMAHAWKS. ALSO SERVES AS A GOOD, IF SIMPLISTIC, SPEAKER AND NEGOTIATOR[/color]
WEAKNESSES: // DOESN'T KNOW WHAT RETREAT MEANS, QUICK TEMPERED WHEN ANGERED, FIGHTS POORLY AGAINST CROWDS, HAS MORE FIGHT THEN SENSE AT TIMES[/color]
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MY LEGEND: // en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Davy_Crockett

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MY HISTORY: // IN THE FAR OFF LAND OF TENNESSEE, IN THE FAR DISTANT PAST OF 1786, THERE WAS BORN A BOY NAMED DAVID CROCKETT. DAVID CROCKETT, OR "DAVY" AS HE CAME TO BE KNOWN, WAS DESCENDED FROM FRENCH AND IRISH IMMIGRANTS, AND THE FAMILY LEGEND STATES HIS FATHER WAS BORN ON THE VOYAGE TO AMERICA, AND THAT HIS GRANDFATHER FOUGHT AND DIED IN THE BATTLE OF KING MOUNTAIN DURING THE REVOLUTIONARY WAR. WHEN HE WAS 8, HE LEARNED HOW TO USE A RIFLE, AND BECAME AN EXCELLENT MARKSMAN, BEING WARNED BY HIS FATHER THAT HE COULDN'T AFFORD TO PAY FOR THE BOYS MISSED SHOTS. CROCKETT MADE SURE THAT THEY WERE FEW AND FAR BETWEEN.

WHEN HE WAS 13, HE RAN OUT INTO THE WILDERNESS, FOR FEAR OF PUNISHMENT FROM HIS FATHER FOR AVOIDING SCHOOL. HE SPENT THREE YEARS OUT IN THE WILDERNESS, LEARNING IMPORTANT SKILLS, HOW TO COOK, HOW TO SURVIVE, AND IT WAS DURING THIS TIME THAT HE ENCOUNTERED THE CRAFTIEST BOBCAT IN TENNESSEE. HE SPENT THE THREE MONTHS OF WINTER TRYING TO CAPTURE THE THING, AND FOR THREE MONTHS IT EVADED HIM, GIVING HIM THE TWO SCARS ON HIS FACE IN THE PROCESS. HE FINALLY CAUGHT THE THING, IN FEBRUARY, WHEN A SNOWBANK FELL ON IT WHILE HE WAS TRACKING IT. HOWEVER, WITH IT FINALLY CAUGHT, HE HESITATED, BEFORE RELEASING THE BEAST. IT SIMPLY WOULD NOT HAVE BEEN FAIR, CAPTURING IT DUE TO A FREAK ACCIDENT. AFTER THAT DAY, FOR THE REST OF HIS LIFE, WHENEVER HE NEEDED HELP, NATURE ITSELF SEEMED TO PROVIDE. HE LEFT THE WOODS SOON AFTER, REUNITING WITH HIS FAMILY, WHO HAD THOUGHT HIM DEAD.

HE SPENT HIS TIME WITH HIS FAMILY WELL, FELL IN LOVE AND GOT HIS HEART BROKE. FELL IN LOVE AGAIN. HE HAD THREE CHILDREN WITH HIS FIRST WIFE WHEN SHE DIED. HEARTBROKEN YET AGAIN, HE LEFT HIS CHILDREN WITH HIS PARENTS AND JOINED THE MILITARY, LEARNING DISCIPLINE AND HOW TO SHOOT WHILE RIDING A HORSE. HE FOUGHT IN THE WAR OF 1812, AND REMARRIED WHILE HE WAS IN THE SERVICE.

AFTER RETIRING FROM THE MILITARY, CROCKETT TRIED HIS HAND AT "POLY-TICKS" AS HE ENJOYED CALLING IT. HE STARTED OUT SERVING ANDREW JACKSON, HIS COMMANDING OFFICER DURING THE WAR. HOWEVER, WHEN THE JACKSONIANS TOOK A DIRECTION HE DIDN'T LIKE, CROCKETT DID AS HE ALWAYS DID. HE STOOD FOR WHAT HE BELIEVED IN, AND OPPOSED JACKSON'S POLICIES. AFTER LOSING HIS RE-ELECTION, HE MOVED TO TEXAS, JUST AS HE HAD PROMISED TO BEFORE THE ELECTION IF HE LOST.

CROCKETT WAS MOST FAMOUS FOR HIS ROLE IN THE DEFENSE OF THE ALAMO. COMING TO THE AID OF HIS LIFELONG FRIEND JIM BOWIE, HE AND THIRTY OF HIS FELLOW TENNESSIANS HELPED FIGHT OFF THE FORCES OF SANTA ANNA FOR THIRTEEN DAYS. CROCKETT AND HIS MEN WERE THE BEST SHARPSHOOTERS OF THE GROUP, HOWEVER, EVEN WITH THEIR HELP, THE TEXANS WERE OUTNUMBERED 10 TO 1. ON THE THIRTEENTH DAY, ONLY CROCKETT, BOWIE, AND CROCKETT'S SURVIVING FIGHTERS HELD THE BARRACKS, AS SANTA ANNA'S FORCES OVERWHELMED THE REST OF THE COMPOUND. BOWIE DIED FROM HIS WOUNDS WITH HIS BACK TO THE WALL, HIS KNIFE STUCK IN A DEAD MEXICAN SOLDIER'S STOMACH AND BOTH PISTOLS EMPTY. AFTER HIS DEATH, CROCKETT SET FORTH AMONGST THE MEXICANS, BURYING HIS HATCHET AND NUMEROUS KNIVES INTO SEVERAL SOLDIERS, GUN SHATTERED FROM BEING USED AS A CLUB OVER ANOTHER'S HEAD. HE DIED WHEN SANTA ANNA'S FORCES FINALLY MANAGED TO GET A CANNON AIMED AT HIM. THE CANNON SHOT TOOK HIS LEG, AND THEN MEXICANS RUSHED HIM AS HE WAS ON THE GROUND. CROCKETT MANAGED TO KILL 16 OF THEM WITH HIS BARE HANDS AND A BAYONET, BEFORE FINALLY SUCCUMBING TO HIS WOUNDS. A SMILE SAT ON HIS FACE, KNOWING THAT HE HAD UPHELD HIS IDEALS TILL THE END.

HOWEVER, EVEN IN DEATH, THE WORLD ALWAYS LOOKED OUT FOR CROCKETT. HIS SPIRIT PASSED INTO THE GRAIL, BECOMING A HEROIC SPIRIT, THOUGH THIS WAS NOT REALIZED UNTIL THIS WAR, WHEN HIS FORM IS FIRST SUMMONED.[/color]
MY GOALS: // CROCKETT WISHES TO EXPLORE THIS NEW WORLD HE FINDS HIMSELF IN, AND TO FIGHT FOR HIS RIGHT, AND THE OTHER SERVANT'S RIGHT, TO LIVE[/color]
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NOBLE PHANTASM: //
Last Stand - "I leave this rule for others when I'm dead
Be always sure you're right — THEN GO AHEAD!"
Rank: B
Type: Passive
Range: N/A
Max Targets: Self

Crockett's Last Stand, the last move Crockett will ever make. This skill generally acts as Battle Continuation B+, allowing Crockett to tank blows which would normally kill him, though the wounds themselves are not affected, just Crockett's ability to ignore them. However, after being fatally wounded (His spiritual core compromised to the point that he cannot be recovered), Crockett gets a boost in Strength and Agility all the way up to B. This effect lasts for three minutes. After the three minutes, Davy will die. However, until then, he'll be a monster in combat, consuming any lifeforce he would have used over time instantly.

Shot Of Lightning - "I never miss"
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Personel
Range: 10-999
Max Targets: 1

On the frontier, Crockett once tamed a lightning storm. With that, he used the storms lightning to make bullets which were as fast as a thunderbolt and pinpoint accurate. Crockett still carries a few of those bullets around, though they are hard to replace, so Crockett is reluctant to use them. Shot Of Lightning has an extreme long range, and will always hit their target. However, they require a lot of prana to make and seal away a small amount of the holders own prana from use to prevent them from going off prematurely. Crockett himself can only make them with the help of a caster or lightning aligned magus. Currently, he has 5 lightning shots.

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CLASS ABILITIES: //

Independent Action
B: Capable of remaining in this world for two days without a established contract. Also capable to live on for a short period of time after suffering extensive damage on his spiritual core.

Magic Resistance
D: Cancel Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.[/color]

SKILLS: //

Bravery
B: Immunity to psychic and psychological ailments.

Charisma
C: Leadership at the level of a General or Governor

Projectile (Daggers/Axes0
B: Thrown projectile weapons are now comparable to bullets

Call Of Nature
A: Nature protects those who protect it. Gains a luck boost to C+ when in areas untamed by humanity.
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STRENGTH: // C

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ENDURANCE: // C[/color]
AGILITY: // C[/color]
MANA: // D[/color]
LUCK: // D[/color]
NOBLE PHANTASM: // B[/color]
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FACE CLAIM: // Original Drawing[/color]
OTHER CHARACTERS: // n/a[/color]
MISC. INFORMATION: // I FINISHED MY COLORING! AND THERE WAS MUCH REJOICING![/color]
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[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

I really like the work you did on your portrait. Hopefully, it can be coloured soon. Now, we let go of the compliments, and get to the hard meat of the matter.

First of all, your stats. They're too high. Please note that even something Ranked E is already beyond human capability.

As a few good examples: Cu Culhain, or however you spell his name, is a demigod from the ancient age of magic with the ability to use magic, and yet his Mana is only C, and his Strength is B. Arturia Pendragon can run up the side of a building with Agility C. Additionally, she also has a Mana rating of B, because she has the blessing of the Dragons, which are the most powerful of magical creatures. While Hassan i Sabbah is "merely" human, he has a lifetime of highly intensive training from THE Assassins.

I must say, that you would have stats closer to Archer, excepting the Mana stat, because he was a mage, AND had the power of the Counter Force backing him up when he was alive. Granted, it wouldn't be an exact match, since you two lived very different lives, but you definitely won't be having B's, A's, and a C.

Your Comet is not acceptable. While some heroic tall tales are fine, due to their plausibility, grabbing a comet by the tail and slamming it into somebody has several prerequisites:

1) There has to be a passing comet. While the earth is constantly bombarded by little meteors, they burn up quickly in the atmosphere. Anything big enough to survive would not necessarily be close enough to grab, either, and comets themselves just pass by. You can't just call a comet out of nowhere.

2) You can't jump into space to grab the comet. That requires either magic, or a miracle. You don't have either.

The Nasuverse operates by a set of rules, and even great heroes abide by them. While Excalibur can fire a deathray that overshadows any of its legends, that is because it has been reworked into a sword powered by the light of the planet itself, and was created by smithing fairies. In the case of Davy, he only has his own wits and abilities about him, and some tall tales are just tall tales.

Speaking of rules, your rifle phantasm, unfortunately, won't work with that mechanic. It has been established that Servants are in fact, weaker copies, shadows of their original selves. As such, despite performing superhuman feats as seen in the game and anime, the real deals were actually more powerful. This isn't as bad as the Comet, however, and some intensive tweaking can make it workable.

Your Magic Resistance is way too high. Magic Resistance is something that you get from fighting against magic in your lifetime. By the 18th and 19th Centuries, magical decline has come close to its apex, and thus, you won't be getting anything close to the higher rungs. At the very most, I'm letting you have a D.

Unfortunately, since there aren't any fairies in America, last I checked, you'll have to ditch the Fairy protection. Davy Crockett might have learned to live in harmony with nature, but that does not mean there are any specific nature spirits out to keep watch over him. You might want to create an original skill instead to represent his nature-harmonic survivalist expertise.

While I understand that the idea is to push in Crockett as a memetic badass, the more outrageous claims are about as plausible in the Nasuverse as the Chuck Norris Fact that "Cthulhu isn't sleeping in R'lyeh, waiting for the stars to be right. He's hiding from Chuck Norris". Long story short, you'll have to edit this profile to conform with the Verse's rules.

The Alamo has not been forgotten. But if we are to remember it, it has to be under a different lens than usual.

[Davy Crockett]

Okay. Made the changes you recommended to the stats. Removed the comet phantasm, and replaced it with one that references Crockett's real life crowning moment of awesome, as he was one of the last fighters in the Alamo alive. Additionally, I replaced the conditions for the Shot Of Lightning one, so that Davy has a limited amount of shots, and would need to ally himself and his master with a caster (or have a master with a lightning affinity) in order to make more bullets. Also, I replaced the fairy thing with a more direct connection with nature.

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Okay, round two.

1) Your new Noble Phantasms is somewhat redundant with regards to Battle Continuation. Either you think of something else, or you ditch Battle Continuation. Also, note that Ranks exist for a reason. I don't mind its present state, so long as you become well aware, and write down, the fact that it can, and will be trumped by a higher-ranked Noble Phantasm, like say, Excalibur.

2) Your Noble Phantasm stat should match the rank of your most powerful Noble Phantasm. You're on a limited magazine of special ammunition. How many shots do you have right now? Please indicate.

3) Call of nature... this one's pretty tricky. Nature isn't exactly a very nice thing with regards to humans. In fact, she made a deal with the Moon to create a species of nature spirits to keep human population in check, resulting in Vampires, but that's opening up a completely new can of worms. I suppose, that as King of the Wild Frontier, you shouldn't have any problems with gaining its support, but you have to understand that Protection of Fairies, which what you originally based this on, grants a luck boost, rather than any particular fairy attack.

What I can suggest, is that this skill boosts your luck whenever you're in a nice, nature-friendly kind of place, like the wilderness that Davy is so used to. Also, indicate how big the luck boost is.

[Davy Crockett]

Finished the second round of stuff

Replaced Battle Continuation with Bravery. Davy was the brave sort after all. Also added the Chunky Salsa rule to Last Stand.

Set the limit of Shot Of Lightning to 5 shots. Thought it a nice round number, plus more likely then not most will be used up by grail monsters.

Updated Call Of Nature to a luck boost. I figured luck boost to C+ is fair, especially considering Crockett's extensive expertise in the area.

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Alright, Davy. You're halfway there.



Things might get tougher from here, but I prepared you as much as I could. So even if they do, always remember the Alamo!

[Davy Crockett]

ALRIIIIGHT!!!

Let's see what hurdles to overcome for the next challenge!

[Aozaki Touko]

First of all, not really a approval point but is the caps on almost everything intended? As in some dramatic effect or so? I'm curious.

Second, although not really preventing you from being approved, it would be nicer to others, specially to your future master if at least your personality had more information about Crockett, the same goes for history even though there is your legend just above it, both are not a must but would be nice to see it added.

Lastly, it's about Last Stand, you need to add two bits of info to it, one being of a average time that Crockett can keep Last Stand active since otherwise you will kill your master with it, also must be added what happens to the injured Crockett after this NP is turned off, does Crockett revert back to his former stand and nearly die from the injuries sustained while it was active?

[Davy Crockett]

1) YES. THE ALL CAPS IS FOR DRAMATIC EFFECT.

2) Will be sure to do so. I'll try to be more clear on Crockett's personality and history

3) I will add the following info to the first post:
~ Last Stand can generally be held active by a higher then average magus partner for around 2 minutes, which is longer then most battles between servants generally last.
~After Last Stand ends, depending on the severity of his injuries, either he will healed enough to go another round (quick regeneration of any unsevere wounds as well), or he will be rendered unconscious but not quite dead (He'll get bettah [/python])

[Aozaki Touko]

1) Good thing that caps just mimic the attention effect of shouting as otherwise I would be having a headache from all this shouting.

2) Will be eagerly awaiting for it.

3) I'm fine with it Last Stand keeping Crockett from dying for two minutes, keeping him at 1HP no matter how many more attacks he receive, albeit limbs chopping and beheading still working as usual, but healing wounds not only take much time as it also a action that require activation from a magus or from a NP just for the act of healing, and Crockett is not a magus nor does he have something like Avalon to heal him.

So my question on the first post was more to see what would happen to Crockett in case he had earned to himself a hole on his stomach, big enough for you to see through him, after Last Stand is deactivated. Servants aren't exactly like humans so they wouldn't really die from a wound like that but one would have problems to fight, or do anything else in those conditions, don't you agree?

[Davy Crockett]

Okay, done with that. Ready for next round of looking through stuff.

[Aozaki Touko]

Now that is more like it.

[2/2 Approval]

[Locked]

[Aozaki Touko]

Profile moved back to the approval section and reopened.

State when you are finished so that we can re-evaluate your profile.

You can continue to rp while at it but you cannot use the changes that are being made now until they are approved.

[Davy Crockett]

Done. Made the change I pmed you about, and upped the range of Shot of Lightning.

[Aozaki Touko]

A endurance boost after you have received a deadly wound is pointless, also Last Stand won't help you if you are beheaded or pulverized and raising two ranks out of sheer determination is not possible, so raising strength and agility to B is more like it.

Lightning Shot new range is ok.

[Tohsaka Rin]

Aside from the fact that I think it is more than just a bit vexing that an approved profile is already unlocked and modified at this early part in the game......

Just as mentioned above. Unstoppable would mean, unkillable (if that is not just an ambitious way of commenting on the stat increase). Raising 2 full stats in 3 Stats is also not nearly close to a sufficient NP Rank and furthermore does it seem too much. The grass ..is also totally impossible. A servant dies, a servant vanishes. He is not a spirit of nature, allowed to modify the area with means like a Marble Phantasm, less have them remain. (Although it would look nice, just technically impossible.)

[Davy Crockett]

Okay, finally got around to making the suggested changes that you guys had. Unstoppable was meant to be a figure of speech. Removed the grass thing. Just kinda felt the effect would be cool.

ROUND 2: FIGHT!!!

[Aozaki Touko]

Better now.

It makes me wonder what will happen to your master when this newly improved Last Stand activates though.

[Approved]

[Locked]