Post by Bedwyr on Jan 16, 2011 5:50:14 GMT -5
[]Well I've said this was coming for a long time, but I finally got around to it. Feel free to toss in your own bad ends, humourous or not. V I'm looking at you~ Even if no one else wants to post/work at posting these, I thought it was interesting. Bedwyr's moment of fail is highlighted in red, its not just Jack's text that is red. Now, read my fail attempt to write Jack! []
Bad Ends: Bedwyr #1: A Sudden Pang…
He heard a sickening tearing sound before he felt the pain in his leg. At the instant he felt the pain he stumbled and backhanded blindly with his blade, of course it hit nothing. Normally he wouldn’t waste a motion like that, but it seemed like he was not in a normal frame of mind. Something cold gripped his soul; it had been a long time since he felt like that, a very long time.
The thing was in his way as he rose. How does he move so quickly?[/color] At least he was not wielding anything along the lines of a noble phantasm, but his own were barely useful without anything to ride. And with injuries…
What would he do? If he continued chasing after his Master, his death would be a certainty. He could not escape. Blood dripped down his shoulder, poured down his shoulder, and the shadow taunted him.
"M'affraid runnin won't do you any good, my dear fellow."
The shadow was right.
I have to… I have to believe in her![/color]
Running would get him killed immediately. His only chance was to cut down this shadow quickly, and get it out of his way, praying that his Master could manage herself until then.
The knife was still in his bad shoulder, restricting his left side’s movement as he rushed the shade. His right foot nearly dragged, slowing his speed considerably, but it still had to be done!
A strike, and the shadow was no longer there at the last second. His sword whipped through the air with no technique, no finesse.
The darkness parted for a being just outside his sword reach. Accursed leg! I can’t even reach him![/color]
He rushed again, and this time his ragged efforts were rewarded with a laugh, and a burning slash down his already bad arm, parting the metal plates of his armour like they were water. He stumbled, and the tendons in his left leg were severed at the knee.
Darkness itself retreated as he struggled to stand. Pain, pain and fear flashed through his mind. He could not, would not lose to this creature!
”Ahahahaha! Ahaha! Oh, m’boy, you don’t seem up ta this!”
Spatharius gave him aid to his feet, lengthening to touch the ground as he rose unsteadily; any weapon instructor would have flayed him alive for seeing that. What a thought to come to mind now… heh Blood came unbidden out his mouth as he straightened.
Is this honour or…? The shade had not touched him, instead it continued its inane cackling.
He moved to take a step, plant an impossible foot, and he succeeded. Blood pooled as he moved, too much blood.
And then, a pang, a knife to the chest. He felt death, painful twisting death.
But the shade had never moved. No knife had come. But still he felt it twisting, fear and pain bubbling in his draining blood.
He had not died; he had not received the knife. She had. Two red rubies fell to the ground.
Failure.
Alone, again. Kingless. Leaderless. Hopeless.
His right knee hit the ground with a loud clang as the armour gave its last breath and faded away, leaving only torn cloth behind, barely attached to him, more red than its natural grey. Even the surcoat faded.
Once again, he attempted to rise. Spatharius… he could not even manage to shift the blade.
But the shadow was still in reach, still cackling.
And he swung.
That was the last of it for his left leg, which broke underneath the last effort, and followed the right leg to the ground with that last ragged swing.
There was no impact of flesh, no resistance. Perhaps the thing was the shadow. His vision blurred, he couldn’t even maintain Spatharius’ presence now, and it faded from his hand.
He couldn’t even maintain how he knelt, collapsing in his own blood. It ran freely from his mouth now. I.. if.. I can still. His good hand gripped blindly forward, searching for a loyal sword, a loyal sword now long gone. It had never failed him before, but now he failed it. No weapon had broken in his hands; he had broken.
Motionless, he let his eyes close. Master… I…[/i] There was no longer anything he could say. He had failed; she had died. It was over, his wish, this world was gone.
Desperately he tried to turn onto his back, to look at the stars once more with eyes that could no longer see. It was surprisingly easy, almost as if his body was being moved by an outside force. When he opened his eyes for the last time, there were no stars. Instead, only a face, darker than the sky he had hoped to see hovered over him.
You look like you need to say something friend, but it appears that your lungs are filling with blood and without air the miracle of sound cannot occur. Now, normally this would be fatal rather quickly, but I suspect you might wish to say something. I can help you with that, we only need to open a direct passage for you to breathe!
Cold steel met the flesh of his throat, and true to the darkness’ words, he felt one last rush of air as his blood spilled out. But there were no words.
Not even thoughts.
The knight’s body broke, and looked filmy and distant, his face only showing regret. His body had died before, but in valliance, taking many beneath his blade.
Now it was pointless. Only his own blood had been spilled onto his blade, his master had fallen, never having accepted him. So many mistakes.
Failure. And with that last thought his body broke into mist and faded from this world.
Bad Ends: Bedwyr #1: A Sudden Pang…
He heard a sickening tearing sound before he felt the pain in his leg. At the instant he felt the pain he stumbled and backhanded blindly with his blade, of course it hit nothing. Normally he wouldn’t waste a motion like that, but it seemed like he was not in a normal frame of mind. Something cold gripped his soul; it had been a long time since he felt like that, a very long time.
The thing was in his way as he rose. How does he move so quickly?[/color] At least he was not wielding anything along the lines of a noble phantasm, but his own were barely useful without anything to ride. And with injuries…
What would he do? If he continued chasing after his Master, his death would be a certainty. He could not escape. Blood dripped down his shoulder, poured down his shoulder, and the shadow taunted him.
"M'affraid runnin won't do you any good, my dear fellow."
The shadow was right.
I have to… I have to believe in her![/color]
Running would get him killed immediately. His only chance was to cut down this shadow quickly, and get it out of his way, praying that his Master could manage herself until then.
The knife was still in his bad shoulder, restricting his left side’s movement as he rushed the shade. His right foot nearly dragged, slowing his speed considerably, but it still had to be done!
A strike, and the shadow was no longer there at the last second. His sword whipped through the air with no technique, no finesse.
The darkness parted for a being just outside his sword reach. Accursed leg! I can’t even reach him![/color]
He rushed again, and this time his ragged efforts were rewarded with a laugh, and a burning slash down his already bad arm, parting the metal plates of his armour like they were water. He stumbled, and the tendons in his left leg were severed at the knee.
Darkness itself retreated as he struggled to stand. Pain, pain and fear flashed through his mind. He could not, would not lose to this creature!
”Ahahahaha! Ahaha! Oh, m’boy, you don’t seem up ta this!”
Spatharius gave him aid to his feet, lengthening to touch the ground as he rose unsteadily; any weapon instructor would have flayed him alive for seeing that. What a thought to come to mind now… heh Blood came unbidden out his mouth as he straightened.
Is this honour or…? The shade had not touched him, instead it continued its inane cackling.
He moved to take a step, plant an impossible foot, and he succeeded. Blood pooled as he moved, too much blood.
And then, a pang, a knife to the chest. He felt death, painful twisting death.
But the shade had never moved. No knife had come. But still he felt it twisting, fear and pain bubbling in his draining blood.
He had not died; he had not received the knife. She had. Two red rubies fell to the ground.
Failure.
Alone, again. Kingless. Leaderless. Hopeless.
His right knee hit the ground with a loud clang as the armour gave its last breath and faded away, leaving only torn cloth behind, barely attached to him, more red than its natural grey. Even the surcoat faded.
Once again, he attempted to rise. Spatharius… he could not even manage to shift the blade.
But the shadow was still in reach, still cackling.
And he swung.
That was the last of it for his left leg, which broke underneath the last effort, and followed the right leg to the ground with that last ragged swing.
There was no impact of flesh, no resistance. Perhaps the thing was the shadow. His vision blurred, he couldn’t even maintain Spatharius’ presence now, and it faded from his hand.
He couldn’t even maintain how he knelt, collapsing in his own blood. It ran freely from his mouth now. I.. if.. I can still. His good hand gripped blindly forward, searching for a loyal sword, a loyal sword now long gone. It had never failed him before, but now he failed it. No weapon had broken in his hands; he had broken.
Motionless, he let his eyes close. Master… I…[/i] There was no longer anything he could say. He had failed; she had died. It was over, his wish, this world was gone.
Desperately he tried to turn onto his back, to look at the stars once more with eyes that could no longer see. It was surprisingly easy, almost as if his body was being moved by an outside force. When he opened his eyes for the last time, there were no stars. Instead, only a face, darker than the sky he had hoped to see hovered over him.
You look like you need to say something friend, but it appears that your lungs are filling with blood and without air the miracle of sound cannot occur. Now, normally this would be fatal rather quickly, but I suspect you might wish to say something. I can help you with that, we only need to open a direct passage for you to breathe!
Cold steel met the flesh of his throat, and true to the darkness’ words, he felt one last rush of air as his blood spilled out. But there were no words.
Not even thoughts.
The knight’s body broke, and looked filmy and distant, his face only showing regret. His body had died before, but in valliance, taking many beneath his blade.
Now it was pointless. Only his own blood had been spilled onto his blade, his master had fallen, never having accepted him. So many mistakes.
Failure. And with that last thought his body broke into mist and faded from this world.