Gudrun (Archer-WIP)

[Jeanne d'Arc]

Archer



"Life is unfair, and it's not a sacred artifact that will change anything"

[/color][/b][/color]: Gudrun
OTHER ALIAS[/color]: Shield Maiden or Valkyrie or even Odin's Daughter
CURRENT AGE[/color]: Between 25 and 30 physically
YEAR OF BIRTH[/color]: Her tale began somewhere during the 5 century but Valkyries were said to be much older than this so she could also be born as a Valkyrie during the same times as Gilgamesh or even older.
GENDER[/color]: Female
ALIGNMENT[/color]: Lawful Evil
OCCUPATION[/color]: Valkyrie
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[/color][/b][/color]: Gudrun is a tall woman thanks to her Nordic origins (5"9' feet). She seem athletic and everything in her gesture or attitude let easily think that she was a warrior experimented.

Her eyes are kinda glassy like if she was truly bored of something everytime.

HEIGHT

[/color]: 9"8'
WEIGHT[/color]: 149.9 lbs
EYE COLOR[/color]: Blue
HAIR COLOR[/color]: Blonde
PIERCINGS[/color]: None
TATTOOS[/color]: She has runic tattoos all over her body but they aren't visible unless she is activating one of her NP or if she is using her runic magic ability.
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES[/color]: Her glassy eyes and her habit or rarely smiling who let a cold feeling to whoever is looking at her.
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[li]Ice Queen

• Like the other Valkyries she saw death a countless times. That's why when she sees someone dying she just seems to don't care at all.

[/li][li]Pragmatic

• She just go to the point. Her master wants someone dead ? She obeys, she needs to strike in the back of someone to kill him ? She'll do it. She is capable of everything to be sure that the path to victory is the shorter and the simpler. Even if this path does not held any glory at all. She hates chivalry and will be ruthless against knights as she considers they way of fighting as pure egoism and hypocrisism.

[/li][li]Cold hearted

• Every relationship she tried to build with a man ended badly. Ended REALLY badly. Because of that she will never more to have a romantic interest in someone and if she happened to grow her feelings toward her master she will purely try to crush them even if she must be silent and suffer because of this. She do not want anyone to follow the same path as hers.

[/li][li]Prideful

• Even if she is capable of striking from the shadows she prefers a real fight. She is used to show to her enemies how powerful she was and it never changed. She will use pragmatic tactics such as striking from behind only if it will bring victory however she'll always fight in true duels. She also don't like to be taken too lightly especially by humans. She'll have a great pleasure to show to them how wrong they are.

[/li][li]Tired

• She doesn't seems to be impressed at all by everything. She fought so many time during so many years that at the end she was just tired by the simple fact of living. She just thinks that humanity is going to destroy herself soon or late and that they're nothing but hopeless.

[/li][li]Siscon

• She is basically one of the people that are the reasons why her sister Brynhild died. She admired her but she never told her, so, when she died because of her adoptive mother and of Siegfried she felt really guilty and she never forgive herself about that.
  
• Lover's complex
  
  • She truly loved Helgi and Siegfried as they were look alike. She wanted to spend her live with both of them when they were alive but she never could manage to even live with one of them. If she sees them she would have a hard time to restrain herself from taking them in her arms or just even crying. She is also more likely to take them as targets
  
  

LIKES

[/color]: Brynhild
Siegfried
Helgi
Asgard
Forests
The sky
Snow
Wolves
Strong alcohol
Strong men
DISLIKES[/color]: Her father Odin
Freyja
Humanity
War
Death
STRENGTHS[/color]: Even as a Archer she is kinda powerful in close combat, she can be a threat for every classes but Sabers. In fact she even fight more in close range. She mainly uses her bow to open the fight and during special times. She also have access to runic magic which can let her be more versatile and allows her to do surprise attacks
WEAKNESSES[/color]: She is an Archer which really reduce her close fighting abilities. Thanks to her weapon mastery as a Valkyrie she is able to stand against most of the classes but she will be outstanded against sabers Berskers or servants with a huge strength. She relies much more on her agility rather than a strength nerfed by her class which make her somewhat a user of hit-and-run tactics rather than using raw power against enemies.
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MY LEGEND: //

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MY HISTORY[/color]: //
MY GOALS[/color]: To have the opportunity of living a new life where she could love Helgi.

[/color][/b][/color]: Her whole equipment was forged by the dwarfs. Which make them as powerful as divine armors and weapons. But since they aren't famous at all they are just considered as weak noble phantasms without any effect.

Bow-Blade : She wields a dual blade that can form in a unique bow that fires magical arrows. The blades are covered with runes.

Valkyrie's armor Forged by the dwarfs the armor is covered with runes and is composed of plates.
NOBLE PHANTASM[/color]: //
CLASS ABILITIES[/color]:
Magic Resistance
Rank : C
She lived during a long era of magic and furthermore fought against a lot of mystical creatures such as giants. She learned how to resist against magic however her Archer class nerfed the potential of this ability.

SKILLS[/color]: //

STRENGTH

[/color]: C
ENDURANCE[/color]: B
AGILITY[/color]: A
MANA[/color]: B
LUCK[/color]: E
NOBLE PHANTASM[/color]: //
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FACE CLAIM[/color]: Original on Gelbooru for the Valkyrie tag
OTHER CHARACTERS[/color]: Nope
MISC. INFORMATION[/color]: I'm french so please be gentle with me about all grammar mistakes I could make, I try my best but tell me if you see anything wrong !
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[Tohsaka Rin]

Welcome to the board. It is a bit too early to give a detailed explanation about the profile, but we have people from all over the World and minor grammar mistakes definitely won't be an issue.

Everyone has those at times, right~?

However, my reason to comment is to avoid that a new member wastes time. The ideas in itself are fine and might work in some scenarios, but there is one big problem with it here.

It won't work in our setting.

I think people like to call it Nasuverse and the Fate Stay Universes are built upon the Servant System, each allowing slightly different things.

I'm not certain as to how deep you have read yourself into the 'Nasuverse', or how familiar you are with the Visual Novels, Novels, Anime, Games, but we are primarily focussing on the first version:

Fate/Stay Night (the three scenarios). While you might see some content of Apocrypha and Extra as well, they were adapted to the FSN setting.

What do I mean by that? The Throne of Heroes is in FSN stated to pick up heroes, which means that they have done important (formerly only good and later on also bad) things to get a place in the throne. A Hero or Anti Hero is defined by having left something behind in the annals of history (either recorded or simply in myth).

People that land in that area are always to some extent human (Demigods; People with other levels of Divinity: Examples: Gilgamesh, Medusa, Herakles, Cu Chulainn, Tamamo no Mae.) In some versions gods threw away either a part of their divinity or all at once and were also wondering around as mortals, performing some deeds as a 'human'.

That already allows some interesting manipulations, but the main aspect remains the same: No gods, spirits or monsters without any kind of human aspect or a Legend to speak of. Of course those parts also go together in combination. Valkyries are not some of the main deities, but are noted as Divines, except for one: and that was Brynhildr. She is in her Legend a Valkyrie and a Human and has also Legend Material as a Human. The same can unfortunately not be said about the other Valkyries.

If you now use Gudrun, the Valkyrie, she would be a character that might be good for Fate/Extra, might eventually work in Fate/Apocrypha, but she won't work at all in Fate/Stay Night & Zero.

Unfortunately, she is not noted to be a demi-god, nor can I actually even recall her having any useful material for a profile. You would have to make up most things and that would make her a totally "Original Character". If you read the rules of that part you might note that the forum rules deny this kind of action.

I ask of you to rethink the idea and take a more suitable candidate for a profile. PS.: If you have taken enough of a look around you might have seen that there is also a kind of Alternate Roleplay. We call it Box RP, and it is a kind of chat rp that might have actually grown by far past the size of the board RP by now.

It would allow this kind of character. So instead of just throwing the concept away, you can apply her to the box rp, IF you are interested in such a thing. For the board however, please choose another character.

Thank you.

Other things to note: As you stated yourself. Archer's are Archer's and their skills are nerfed. You should not overstate her melee abilities too much as an Archer. Furthermore a Valkyrie can't be older than her father, Odin. Placing her in Gilgamesh' Time won't work. Lawful Evil would not fit to a Valkyrie like her, except you find something in her history to make her evil. ...and the height. You use two different heights and especially one is ENORMOUS. Just some pointers for the next profile.

[Jeanne d'Arc]

I see, I see...

This message won't be long but I thought that Gudrun could be a potential servant, after all she did became a human. She loved a human, she lost her virginity with him (wich, for a valkyrie is clearly prohibited) and was "fired" from her state of Valkyrie and from the Valhala much as Brynhild herself. So, as Brynhild is here on this forum I thought that Gudrun could be a servant (Being "humanized" by Odin himself let me thought that her divinity has been seriously lowered).

But if this is really a problem then I'll start another servant, it doesn't bother me at all.

I also knew that Archers have their ranks kinda low but I also thought that fighting in close range as Archer in Stay Night wouldn't be a problem with the good abilities but if it's also a problem then I give you my apologies.

Thanks for replying anyway ! I knew that gods weren't allowed to be servants as I follow the nasuverse for a while now but I thought that Gudrun and Brynhild were some "exceptions" of this fact.

[Tohsaka Rin]

Well, if, and it is a really big if, you are able to find the story where this happened and there is also enough material to fuel the servant idea, then you are ready to go.

However a character who had nothing of a story as a human, besides having once been a Valkyrie and becoming a human later on, is either just an empty shell, or you would need to make everything up (not allowed).

If Brynhildr would not have so much material as a Human Brynhildr (and name alternatives) then she would not have been allowed either. Her story would have been: 'Got a child'. That has no impact on anything and also does not make a great legend. It would definitely not fulfill the requirements of becoming a Hero (or) Anti-Hero or Villain.

So, if she has not fought in a War (written somewhere) or done anything significant and known after losing her status, she would not be a candidate. We don't need quotations like in some scientific work, but the source is required.

I don't know of any, but if you have a source that has everything you need, you can certainly proceed. We will just have to take a brief look at the source to verify the contents. You also need to consider the NPs, although they are not essential for board servants, not having them has a mild effect on RPed battles.

And yes, Archers can still survive in Melee. EMIYA and Gilgamesh are good for that. But it currently looks like she just has Archery as a secondary trait and it is not even her best discipline, just having received the bow to fit to the class Archer.

I would avoid to build a character and then squeeze him/her into a class, rather than building the character together with the Class. However there is no doubt that Valkyries from their weapon sets could theoretically fit in almost any class, just that the question is how many legendary weapons they would have in their arsenal in each class and how useful it would be in it.

Bottom line: If you think you can make Gudrun work, then please go on, but I honestly have so far not seen any useful source to make her work.

[Jeanne d'Arc]

Okay okay !

So, rather than talk about Gudrun I have a new servant in mind that will work for sure (to be true I've got like dozens of servants in mind).

So could I start a new sheet ? Did I just edit everything or must I start a new profile ?

Thanks again for answering so quickly !

[Tohsaka Rin]

It would be better if you were to make a new Thread. I will leave this thread as it is for now that you can just copy the data you want to keep in the new sheet.

It looks better with Subject, Thread History, and replies to have a fresh start and the correct Thread Name in all posts without going through endless modifying in everything.

Good luck with Jeanne then. Just keep in mind to fit her into FSN, so please nothing like a Ruler Class Servant or too much Apocrypha madness. I think you know already, so just saying this here for the fun of it~

[Jeanne d'Arc]

No problem, I'll try my best to make her the most lovable character ever mwaha ~

(Yes, even Arthuria will kill herself with her jealousy)