Ratatosk{Magus/WIP}

[Ratatosk]

Ratatosk



"Courage is the magic that turns dreams into reality"

[/color][/b][/color]: // Ratatosk
NICKNAMES[/color]: // Tosky, Squirrel boy, The lord of monsters
AGE[/color]: // Actual age is roughly estimated at over 10,000; even for a Summon Spirit reincarnated into human form. He looks no older than 16 because of this
DATE OF BIRTH[/color]: // UNKNOWN
GENDER[/color]: //male
ALIGNMENT[/color]: // chaotic good, his own
OCCUPATION[/color]: // Summon Spirit, Musician somewhat
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[/color][/b][/color]: //
Normal Ratatosk
Yin and Yang
in Disguise!?
ready to fight.

HEIGHT

[/color]: //5'7"
WEIGHT[/color]: //115 Lbs
EYE COLOR[/color]: // Green{Though they turn red depending on what kind of mood he is currently in}
HAIR COLOR[/color]: // Blond
PIERCINGS[/color]: // N/A
TATTOOS[/color]: //N/A
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES[/color]: // star-shaped birthmark just above the collarbone
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[/color][/b][/color]: //

• Crafty
  
  • Ratatosk quite skilled in getting what he needs and only enforces his will on himself more than his adversaries, primarily to avoid the point of wanting to use violence. If he does use violence however, it is mainly to beat his opponent senseless.
  
  
• Sarcastic
  
  • Tosky's personality can be known as sarcastic in nature and tone when he speaks, beleing the fact that he has a razor sharp wit like that of a sword. Ratatosk's sarcasm can also grate on the nerves of even the most powerful magi, making him quite annoying to be around, but if one were truly annoyed, they would easily say their ten cents worth in telling Tosky to shut up, which would be easy on their ears.
  
  
• Cautious
  
  • Despite being able to hold his personality in check, Ratatosk is very cautious about what he does every time he is out and about, often using the shadows of tall buildings and such to keep from being spotted by an unwanted enemy or by a monster he knows nothing about. When within a vastly large croud of people, Tosky blends in quite nicely; making him difficult to locate unless the target searching for him was airborn, but even if they found him, they'd have trouble attacking him without luring him out of the crouds first.
  
  
• Tactical spy
  
  • Ratatosk uses tactical skills of covert and modern espienage styles, this much is certain as nobody has ever seemed to notice him, and that usually results in their premature defeat when they least expect it. Ratatosk also uses his surroundings in order to ambush others, being able to use the trees as a cover when moving about and spying on his adversaries.
  
  
• Glutton for punishment
  
  • Ratatosk is not like other people, he takes hits and does not fall from them. He does however, feel pain like mortal meatbag humans, near fatal accidents and the like are painful to him, and things that kill mortals can kill him; even if he has been defeated by such in combat once before. The only difference is that his 'Core' essense cannot be destroyed by physical means, only by a high level Thaumatergy spell can his essense be dispelled, the 'Core' will remain dormant if this happens and Ratatosk will sleep until the next Grail War.
  
  

LIKES

[/color]: // Peace, the moon, friendship, training in the martial arts, nature, reading, music
DISLIKES[/color]: // Betrayal, competition, brutality other than his own, jerks, weak people, half-assed oppinions, people who hurt nature
STRENGTHS[/color]: // Honest, loyal, friendly, trustworthy
WEAKNESSES[/color]: //blunt, abraisive, rude, violent
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MY FAMILY LINE

[/color]: // Yggdrasil Family Line: An ancient and rare family line. Though not aristocratic, they are formidible fighters with thaumatergic abilities. Decay had whittled the family line however to almost nothing and had caused strife between them and the church due to witch hunts. As the heir apparent to the family name, Ratatosk must fight in battle against a worthy opponent in the Grail War.

MY HISTORY[/color]: //

MY GOALS[/color]: // Quite simple actually... I will continue to hunt down stronger opponents to further test myself and learn the best strategy to counteract them in combat.
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[/color][/b][/color]: // Ratatosk's Core: Mysterious bead holding the power of a thaumaturgy spell placed on it. It is actually the source of power for Ratatosk and is a limiter on his prana.

Guitar{Ratatoskr}: A guitar he fashioned on his own using his ambidexterity and a little elbow grease. The songs he plays on it are good to listen to, but painful if he uses thaumaturgy with each strum of the strings in a battle, but none the less, he uses it for his music more than for his fights.

Nether Traitor: Treasured Blade of the Yggdrasil Family Line, It is bound to Ratatosk and cannot be taken by anyone, it is equiped with regenerative and speed based abilities, making it an unlimited code of sorts, the blade itself literally packs a punch if it hits a target directly if used in battle.
RANK[/color]: //
ELEMENT[/color]: //Water and Fire/ Ginnungagap is non-elemental
EXPERTISE[/color]: // Guitar Playing: Tosky plays a mean guitar, and can wail on it like bobodies business, He has such an ambidexterous hand with the guitar that the songs he plays are perfectly tuned to his abilities, he even plays it in battle, though rarely; shooting Ignus with each strum of the strings.

Covert Spying: Ratatosk is a novice when it comes to spying, but expresses it by hiding in the shadows making it impossible to see him without 'mystic eyes of presence detection'.

Swordplay Mastery: Ratatosk is quite skilled with a sword, the Nether Traitor being the weapon of choice for him. He has access to 2 of his element artes when he uses a sword.
MAGIC CIRCUITS[/color]: //
SPELLS[/color]: //
[Ignus] ([Fire]Offense)
Rank: [C]
Cost: [40 Pr]
Range: [10 meters]
Effect: [launches a fireball at the target. Upon impact, the fireball explodes knocking the target back as well as doing moderate damage
Incantation quote used:
From the Centurion of fire
I call upon thee to send your burning wrath
to strike mine enemies and burn them to the ground!
IGNUS!]

[Aqua] ([Water]Offense/launch)
Rank: [C]
Cost: [40 Pr, 80 Pr if used while near water source]
Range: [10 meters, doubled to 20 if used near a source of water such as a fountain or stream]
Effect: [Unleashes a great stream of water from below target. Deals moderate damage as well as launching the target skyward. If this spell is somehow used near water, the guyser generated by this spell will have its range and prana cost doubled.
Incantation Quote used:
From the Centurion of Water
Form a guyser below mine enemies
And launch them towards the heavens!
AQUA!]

[{Ginnungagap}] ([Non-elemental]Offense)
Rank:
Cost: [80 Pr]
Range: [20 meters]
Effect: [Powerful Non-Elemental spell only usable by Ratatosk himself, even with its meek 20 meter range, it still packs a devestating punch. this attack unleashes a great sphereical beam of energy at the opponent, and once it hits, the attack explodes, deals heavy damage, and knocks the target back
Incantation Quote Used:
The cosmos shines
and heralds destruction
purge all who sin
and send them back unto your dominion
Ain Soph Aur!
GINNUNGAGAP!]

Burning Havoc{Fire/Melee/Knockdown}
Rank: E
Cost: 5 Prana
Range: Melee range ONLY
Effect: A Kick that knocks the opponent down, imbued with the power of fire to further devestate an opponent.
Quote used:
Let Havoc Burn!

Deluge Fangs{Water/Melee/Arial/Knockback}
Rank: E
Cost: 16 Prana
Range: Melee Range ONLY
Effect: Ratatosk bashes his target skyward and proceeds to keep them off the ground, then makes a swipe that sends water imbued shockwaves crashing into the opponent to knock them back.
Quote Used:
Let fangs rain destruction down upon you!

PLAYER'S NAME[/color]: //Ratatosk
FACE CLAIM[/color]: //Emil Castagnier; Tales of Symphonia: Dawn of the New World
OTHER CHARACTERS[/color]: //First one
MISC. INFORMATION[/color]: //Time Battle: This is Ryuusei Von Dragmire's Theme for a battle encounter
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[Ratatosk]

Come what may; whether it be Constructive criticism, or lame witty remark, The Hiden Mist Baron is now ready for you to reveal your hand. Just tell me what needs editing and I'll make sure to deal it.

[Gilgamesh]

Let us start. Should start by changing your name to the character's.

First, I don't think that Ryuusei would be able to change his eye colors just because he got mad. I don't think that's even physically possible. Unless he takes the time to put contacts on and all that. Oh, and your age is wrong. The war takes place in 2027, not 2017.

Next, that's a pretty... interesting name there? I don't think that Japan even has any Barons, since that's strictly a western title, like knights and lords and kings. For that matter... Dragmire sounds pretty... non-Japanese a surname, too. Also, since you're a purely eastern family (without even going to the Clock Tower...?), you'd end up doing eastern brand of thaumaturgy, which means no Crest. So I'll have to ask you to, at the very least, halve your prana.

Also, this.

but if the thing using them is a human or a servant

Why mention Servants? They're not common knowledge at all. It sounds like your family has a history of clashing with reanimated spirits of ages past... which is hardly going to be the case.

You also neglected to mention your family's age. On another note, any particular field of research, or do they just run around being allies of JUSTICE?

Lastly... why say what your family tends to think, or for that matter, make them think similarly? Tradition, I get, but this is personality. Are they a hivemind?

Personal History:

...Developing his own spell between 6 and 12? I know people want to be genii, but this is pushing it. He's not going to be developing his own spells for a long time, to be honest.

Also, last I checked, there was no special magic academy in the East. The reason for that is because eastern thaumaturgy is decliiiining and dying when compared to the much more robust Western style. So you'll have to cut that, too.

I'll also have to wonder how a boy who is not legal in any part of the world except maybe in some corners of Africa would be able to travel around. This ain't a shonen manga where you can jump the nearest chocobo and ride to the next town. You need licenses and what not to ride cars and planes.

...Also, seriously, why would he be afraid of assassins? Kidnap a princess? This ain't videogame world where you have to fear the mundane shadows lurking around and whatnot.

And here, it seems that he's crammed in quite a bit of learning in the 4 years between leaving whatever home he had and now. Learning, and more to the point, MASTERING a highly advanced spell... and learning karate... and also taking up the guitar? If Ryuusei's going to be more than proficient in even one of these studies, he'd probably end up having to have much more time working. And also be of a legal age. And have money. People don't learn karate by punching trees, nor are there going to be that many masters who would take a callow, untested youth without papers or ID under their wings with no questions asked.

Most importantly... how would someone who apparently is a magical hobo as far as the world is concerned, with no connections to the Church, to the Clock Tower, to the Einzberns, to the Mezzanotes, even know of the Grail War and enter it?

Next up... equipment. These gauntlets. Since they seem to have some sort of thaumaturgical effect, being able to perfectly reflect all light and discriminate between sun and moonlight... they should be a mystic code, with an upkeep cost. And a spell slot, even if you have to knock off another spell to stay within the limit of five. Where did he even get them? Also, no, they're not going to reflect mystic eyes. Just for the record.

...Although... why would a water and fire magus even dabble in light trickery? Actually, it doesn't really make sense for him to have these gauntlets as is, since he has shown no indication in studying these arts.

Rank: This refers to his rank in the Clock Tower, not his items. He'll have none, having not been to the Tower.

Skills:

...Yeah, that's about on par with an actual Servant skill. No suppressing your prana emissions.

You'll also have to put guitar playing and martial arts in here too, though like I said, at this age, he's not going to be fairly good at it.

Magic Circuits: Like I said, drop that prana. You won't have a crest, you're from the east... you won't be a powerhouse.

Spells:

First, you'll need chant lines for them. All of them.

Aqua and Ignus: Drop these ranges. Not even by 99%, more like 99.9! 10 meters should be as high as they can get, since the farther the spell goes, the more prana it takes.

Also, you'll have to up the costs of these two spells to be more in line with their heat-seeking / high-amount-of-water effects.

Steam Shield: How does a shield made of steam protect him again, aside from scorching his skin?

Scorching Mist: No such thing as plusses or minuses in spell ranks. Drop that minus. Also 15 meters for the radius for the spell.

Pyroclastic Mist: Same thing as above - get rid of the plus. But first, as it stands, it's denied. You've managed to squeeze two effects into one spell: freezing and heating. Accordingly, it will have to be separated in two... and you'll have to drop one of your other spells. Also, drop that range by... a lot. Seriously, 150 meters huh? Probably 15 meters, at best.

On more frivolous note... what do the laws of thermodynamics have to do with this? It looks like a simple case of superheating a frozen soda pop, nothing to do with actual physics...

This should be it. For now.

[Ratatosk]

Guess it's time to get to work.