Hetare Yehua (Master)

[Hetare Yehua]

Hetare Yehua



"The average person knows next to nothing about how their own technology works. It may as well be magic to them. As magi we must capitalize on this."

[/color][/b][/color] Hetare Yehua
NICKNAMES: //[/color] Lady Black Box
AGE: //[/color] 27
DATE OF BIRTH: //[/color] 19 April
GENDER: //[/color] Female
ALIGNMENT: //[/color] Lawful Neutral
OCCUPATION: //[/color] Hacker, Magus
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[/color][/b][/color] In some rather avant garde fashion

HEIGHT: //

[/color] 184cm
WEIGHT: //[/color] 70kg
EYE COLOR: //[/color] Golden Brown
HAIR COLOR: //[/color] Brown
PIERCINGS: //[/color] Ears Only
TATTOOS: //[/color] Command Seal taking the form of three interlocking spiked cogwheels, located (much to her irritation) in the center of her lower back.
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES: //[/color] Asian features in a European city, also tall for a woman.
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• Driven
  
  • When Hetare sets her sight on a goal she relentlessly pursues it. Adversity or inability is merely a temporary set back, soon or later she will achieve her goal no matter what it is. There are no barriers that cannot be broken.
  
  
• Orderly
  
  • Not having known much stability in her life Hetare constantly seeks to instill order into her life where ever she can. She is extremely neat, everything has a proper position and place to be in. On a positive side it makes her cautious and thoughtful, on the negative side it makes her prone to inflexibility and easier to unbalance with something she did not expect.
  
  
• Family First
  
  • Though currently reduced to just her sister and herself Hetare is devoted to her family. She dotes on her sister and is loathe to be apart from her too long. She loathes her father for having ruined their name but at the same time cannot stand others insulting him or the Yehua name. She has devoted much of her life to restoring her family's reputation, restoring their position in the Magic Association.
  
  
• Futurist
  
  • Though she project a cynical attitude Hetare very much believes the future can be better then the present and exceed any past glory. She sees technology as the primary avenue for that and pursue new tech with a passion. To a lesser degree almost anything new captivates her.
  
  

LIKES: //

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-Her Sister
-Traveling
-Classical Music
-Dancing
-High Quality Items
DISLIKES: //[/color]
-Insulting her Father/Family
-Her Father
-Cooking
-Cheap Workmanship
-People assuming she's native Chinese
STRENGTHS: //[/color] Unlike most magi Hetare does not spurn the modern world and is aware of just how useful technology can be. Among the best hackers in the world (via magecraft) with a knowledge of computers and their programing. Obtaining that skill has also made her excellent in areas of research and intelligence gathering. She also has hacked several financial institutions over the years allowing her to live free of financial concerns and acquire almost any normal item. A magus from an old family, Hetare has several powerful spells at her command and the capacity to put them to use.
WEAKNESSES: //[/color] Hetare lacks real combat experience, particularly at melee range. She simply has never had to handle anything more dangerous then an unarmed thug. In a very real sense she fits the stereotype of spell casters being cannons made of glass. Perhaps more importantly her family has been deprived of its treasures, leaving her only the dregs to use as tools. She is also conscious that her skill with technology is of limited application in the magus world, you cannot hack an old castle that lacks even electric lights. Also knowing she is talented and having completed a revolutionary spell makes her prone to overconfidence. Finally she has a psychological blind spot with regards to her family and tends to behave less rationally when they are brought up.
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MY FAMILY LINE: //

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The Yehua family has a recognized lineage of nine generations. The family existed has existed for over a thousand years but only fragmentary records exist from before 1221. They first emerged as a well developed family so it is certain that their first head was not the first of the line. Long based in Asia Minor, their ancestral home lies outside Constantinople. Noted for inconsistent possession of Mystic Eyes allowing them to read any text regardless of language. The family has a long tradition of scholarship, particularly in the sciences and a cosmopolitan attitude. Exploration of science via magecraft and vice versa was long the norm. Many of the family's oldest spells use scientific concepts not seen until centuries after their creation. And in defiance of magecraft tradition they have always embraced and followed technological advancement.

Politically the Yehuas were fluid, drifting from faction to faction within the Association. Eventually they joined the Clock Tower for good in the Elizabethan Era. In that same generation the family made the shocking and disturbing decision to emigrate. They left their stronghold outside Istanbul for the Americas, settling into a new location along the Hudson River. This shocking decision made an already unconventional family an object of no small derision, from which the family's status never truly recovered due to prejudice against Americans in the European dominated Association.

The carefully concealed truth of the matter was that the family felt they had no choice. A seismic disturbance had disrupted the careful currents of power that formed their spiritual land. However no suitable land existed unclaimed within the Old World. Several years of nervous searching before birthing an heir followed. Eventually a compatible location was found unclaimed in the New World. In fact it was a spiritual land of superb caliber, superior to their now deceased land.

More then conscious of the loss of prestige and the terrible risk they had taken the family spent the following generations rebuilding their status. It proved difficult and the family was always relative outsiders. In time though it rose gradually, perhaps because despite their unorthodoxy the family's age could not be denied. If perhaps lowest among peers they were still peers, next to younger upstart families.

By the time of Hetare's grandfather the family was considered settled and if not respectable not intolerable. Hetare's grandfather built through his lifetime with considerable political skill and a well liked reputation as an excellent magus. At his death he believed the title of Lord to be reachable within a few generations. His heir however proved to be the family's downfall.

Hetare's father was a heretic. While disagreeing with aspects of Mage Association policy was not uncommon Hetare's father derided the entire organization. He concluded that in their attempts to preserve magecraft over the centuries the Association had doomed it to stagnation and demise. In particular he blamed the obsession with genetics and lineage, believing the manipulations of mage family's reduced the whole populations potential for a few extra magic circuits. While the practice of isolation left what he believed were innumerable latent talents in the normal population unrealized. Hetare's father was not the first to reach that conclusion, and even had quiet agreement from surprising corners, but he compounded his radicalism with numerous political missteps . Eventually Yehua family was forced to flee, leaving the Association and the most of family's accrued holdings behind. Hetare has spent most of her adult life trying to rebuild the family position.

The Yehua family possesses a Sorcery Trait known as Amber Translation. A type of Mystic Eyes the potential to develop them exists within the family but has defied refinement. Less then half the heads of the family possessed them, and no possessor failed to be the head of the family. As possessors were superior scholars this became seen as a way to activate the eyes, forming a long tradition of scholarship in both magus and mundane area. More generally the family spells are dominated by Lightning, the strongest affinity in the line though Wind spells have been known.

MY HISTORY: //[/color] Hetare was born to Jacob and Sari Yehua in the family home in New York. Her mother was an third generation Chinese American physicist, her daughter is a spitting image of her. Her father was of course a magus. While her father was often absent in her early years but both were loving parent. Hetare earliest memories though are dominated by her grandfather. Having passed on his crest the old man was retired, but more then willing to help raise the next heir to the family name. She took from him a devotion to family and pride in her heritage. He died peacefully when Hetare was eight.

It was the first of several tragedies to befall the Yehua. Though as a young girl she of course was shielded from much of it, Jacob Yehua was proving a radical and dangerous head of the family. Without his father's restraining hand this became worse. Within two years he had made enough enemies within the association that he was targeted for elimination. Getting a hold of his research several families tried to have a Sealing Designation leveled. Not entirely without allies Jacob got word of this and hastily arranged a departure from the association. Stirring up questions about the obvious political motivations aroused fears from neutral factions that if it was leveled here the Sealing Designation might become a tool of political assassination used again and again. Becoming muddled the eventual compromise reached was that whatever the merit the motion for sealing held was irrelevant because Jacob Yehua had withdrawn from the Mage's Association.

The victory though was Pyrrhic. The controversy let the Yehua property be seized, the family fled mere hours before capture. Generations of work were taken and little remained. Fortunately the Yehua family was never as settled and isolated from the world as most magi though, and their bank accounts survived. What followed was several years on the run for the family while the compromise was reached. And the price of victory was that because he was as the Yehua were no longer members of the Association, they had no standing to have their former possessions returned.

Eventually the family home was returned, but gutted of all of value. Jacob would have no part of the place, he kept the family on the move. Paranoia ruled the head of the Yehua family, whether justified or not Hetare still does not know. In the middle of all of this Hetare's little sister Sarah was born.

With parents always busy responsibility for her little sister often fell on Hetare. Entering her teen years caring for a small child while on the run wasn't easy, but somehow the two of them survived. In a way Hetare grew to enjoy the constant travel, still insulated from many concerns. Her father removed that protection before long though, being on the run was no excuse to give over training as a magus. He pushed his older daughter hard. Sharing his views he detailed the ways (as he saw it) the Mage's Association had grown stagnant and corrupt and how he'd been wronged. Influence by her grandfather first Hetare never came to full agreement but kept this from her father. Sarah was not kept ignorant of the family's background but though he claimed to support the idea her father never began instructing Sarah in magecraft. He claimed to have something special in mind for the younger daughter.

Whatever that was never happened. When Hetare was fifteen her parents died in an car accident. She was left alone with her five year old sister. Through drive and lots of hard word Hetare endured. Eventually she returned to America and through a friend of her mother was able to be admitted to a small engineering college in New England. Since she was young Hetare had dove right into technology under the encouragement of her parents, and obtained a degree in computer science. She was undistinguished as a student, but in reality held back to pursue her own callings. First with her father and then on her own Hetare worked to craft a spell that would allow her to possess and control computer systems. While in college it became usable.

She joined the underground and online community of hackers, seeking to manipulate a world increasingly reliant on computerization to her own advantage. She succeeded. Able to bypass systems with seemingly no effort, to outsiders ignorant of magecraft she became known as Lady Black Box. Nobody could figure out how she worked, but she worked. In reality Hetare considered this something of a mistake, as she had left traces for others to find. Over the the long run she embraced the idea, using the identity as stalking horse to find ways to better conceal herself. And it gave her an opportunity for friends that new nothing of her, a safe haven as it were.

Lady Black Box committed numerous electronic pranks and crimes over the years. However the true identity of the hacker remains elusive. And Hetare's greatest achievements left no trace at all. The main upswing was money. Hacking numerous financial institutions Hetare made herself wealthy, even by the standards of mage families. On a lark she once found her own file on Interpol, to date the law has only a vague notion that a hacker by her handle exists, and no idea of about the salami slicing, inside trading, and theft Lady Black Box was truly responsible for.

While this improved Hetare and Sarah lot in life immensely for Hetare it lacked fulfillment. Her grandfather wouldn't accept the family as two girls living of easy money and neither could she. Further more in traveling around the world and the trials following her parents death Hetate had realized something. Her father was right. Mage society was headed for inevitable disaster unless it changed in very fundamental ways. Her father had been a fool though, and the more Hetare agreed with him the more she loathed how badly he had failed. She resolved to join the Association and gain acceptance as a student at the Clock Tower, for her family's history and for the Mage's Association's own good. Unfortunately the family's enemies had not died with her father, and the application has been held unanswered. Not even denial, just excuses. Hetare has spent much of her time especially in the past few years contacting magi and attempting to gain their support, alongside wandering the world with her sister.

Six months ago an offer came to her. She received a letter signed “Waver Velvet” who explained that he had been an acquaintance of her father and would consider helping her. There would be a price though. He argued that the factions that remembered the Yehua name would need something to convince them to stand aside. Waver Velvet suggested an event taking place in the city of Lucca as an apt demonstration of ability. The recreation of the Holy Grail War that he had participated in thirty-three years previous. Meeting with this Waver Velvet in England, and Hetare found he holds a title within the Clock Tower. Though suspicious of his motivations Hetare eventually agreed to go to Lucca.

MY GOALS: //[/color] Gain acceptance within the Association, further her research combining magecraft and technology, and over the long term change the way magus society operates before it stagnates to death. The Grail War is more an opportunity for other things, ultimate victory being almost beside the point.
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[/color][/b][/color] Hetare has an affection for technology and as a result loves to use gadgets and other devices. She has sufficient financial resources and savy to acquire almost anything commercially available as quickly as possible. She also keeps replacements, spare parts, and batteries in her car, apartment, and several storage locations for quick repairs. She believes anything worth having is worth being able to replace quickly. She also has compromised several computer systems around the world to supplement her hardware.

• Amber Locket- An heirloom from Hetare's grandfather. A gold locket fronted by a large round piece of amber with unusual sparkles. Inside is a picture of her grandparents and Hetare has added one of her mother and sister on the other half of the locket. In reality it is a minor magus tool. Looking at the locket with Amber Translation reads an alchemically encoded hypnotic message producing a more serene state of mind. Increases concentration slightly and is good for stress relief.
  
  
• The Black Box- Hetare's custom built from scratch personal laptop. Loaded with applications to let Hetare manage and collect data along with several hacker assist programs. In addition to wireless and cable connections includes an accessory satellite phone connection allowing access to the internet from almost anywhere in the world. Notable applications include a database of legends to assist in identifying servant and a scanner program that identifies text allowing her digitize any book among others.
  
  
• Smartphone- Though she prefers the power of her laptop Hetare carries a late model smartphone containing many of the same capabilities.
  
  
• Mercedes-Benz S Class- Personal vehicle, a late model silver sedan. Mahogany wood work, leather heated seats, and a world class stereo system with noise canceling. Incorporates a full computer in the main console. Cellular internet connection. Can be remotely activated and a custom program enables it to drive somewhat via cameras and object sensors built to help assist in parking. In a city though its almost certain to hit something traveling any distance.
  

RANK: //[/color] None (Application has been “Pending” for over a decade now)
ELEMENT: //[/color] Lightning (Wind)
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Hetare is undeniably talented but unorthodox for a magus. She has already crafted one spell to capitalize on the modern world and views this as only a start. The spells she knows for combat are focused on distance striking and offense.

Her signature spell and sorcery trait makes Hetare fearsome in the computer realm. She only perfected the spell by amassing skill in electronics and programming. Though the latter was fairly easy thanks to her Mystic Eyes. Without her magecraft she could still work as a programmer or software engineer. She is also a fair hand at repairing electronics and has assembled her own computer more then once.

Being able to boost her mental capacity and able to take in information at high speed Hetare is naturally suited to scholarly pursuits. A long tradition in the family. She was exposed to many languages deliberately while a small child with a fluid mind for such things and has cultivate this since.

Having been denied the traditional resources of a magi family Hetare has compensated with excellent researching and intelligence gathering ability to assemble what she lacked. Likewise she is skilled at deceptions, a skill she was force to develop to use her skill as a hacker.


MAGIC CIRCUITS: //[/color] The talented daughter of an old family with her crest Hetare has a maximum of 411 prana
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Mystic Eyes of Translation (Amber Translation) (Sorcery Trait)
Rank: C
Cost: 1 Pr (per minute)
Range: N/A
Effect: Eyes called “Ultimate Readers” that enable high level processing of visualized information regardless of the form. Believed to operate directly on the concepts of information and meaning piercing the encoding of language, cypher, or form to process the data and intent directly. A page of text can be read at high speed with a mere glance, even capturing fine print. Cyphers and language barriers are meaningless before these eyes. Does not apply simply to text but any form of visualized information, grasping the underlying meaning. However not all forms of expression are equally precise which effects the result. When viewing a work of art for example no more then impressions are formed much like any normal viewer might reach. The opposite is the case when viewing a mathematical equation and the answer to a formula become clear instantly while errors become apparent quickly.

Applied to a human, one can read the proverbial “body language.” However few people are precise enough in their movements or gestures for this to yield more then vague information like a general emotional state. For example one cannot use the eyes as perfect lie detector, but might note nervousness or evasiveness. Noted to be more effective against the martial arts, as stances and moves hold a more defined purpose that may be read. This makes gives the eyes of some use in defense through enhanced reactions.

The potential exists in the Yehua family but despite centuries of cultivation this potential has only been realized under a dozen times. To some they might be considered Pure Eyes being purely perception related, however the effect is strong enough to be considered magecraft. Its applications in magecraft itself are somewhat limited though. What insight might be gained from watching a spell is largely redundant to a practiced magus. Reading a description of a spell does not allow it to be learned instantly, no matter how detailed. Caused the family to support a tradition of more mundane academic pursuit merged with magecrafting. In more recent years Hetare has discovered these eyes are of use in dealing with modern computers. Electronic circuits and computer programming languages being exceptionally precise they are naturally compatible with being read.

A single action as normal for Mystic Eyes. Classified as Amber under the Noble Colors system. Nicknamed “Amber Translation” for casual reference as a consequence.

Flare Bite (Lightning)
Rank: E
Cost: 5 Pr
Range: 20m
Effect: Prana is used to energize air in a limited area resulting in a ball-like mass of charged particles then fired at the target. A recreation of the phenomena of ball lightning, conceptually similar to (hypothetical) plasma weapons. In practical effect it is similar in to a small caliber handgun albeit the wounds it leaves are electrical burns.

Has existed within the Yehua family crest since the earliest generations and may be used as a single action spell.


Synapse Thought Driver (Lightning)
Rank: C
Cost: 10 Pr (initial) +3 Pr (per minute)
Range: N/A
Effect: A reinforcement type spell using the lightning element to enhance the body's electrochemical nerve impulses. Their nervous system and mental capacity are boosted to superhuman levels. Calculations and mental processing capacity dramatically increase. A user can perform complex math in their head in a moment that would normally require large amounts of number crunching on paper. Reaction time is accelerated and the world can be said to slow to a crawl. Overclocking the brain like this carries some risk though and can only be safely used for around ten minutes.

Enhanced control via reinforced nerves and reaction times make the caster far more agile and dexterous. While this spell is in effect the body can be pushed to its limits, stronger, faster, and far more able to endure pain. This effect is not superhuman but rather allows one to more fully to use ones current physical potential. A normal caster would be hard pressed by a dedicated professional athlete for example, as the athlete has increased their underlying potential well beyond the norm. Pushing the body in this way is also immensely fatiguing with considerable potential for injury from muscle strain, so care is generally taken to remain within the users physical norms. Even without excessive pushing more then five minutes of physical activity is dangerous. A similar effect applies to senses, but without the risks of strain as it is simply better processing.

Originally developed by the Yehua family to aid in academic pursuits. A scholar's spell with application in combat. Considered a natural compliment to Amber Translation allowing greater insight to be gained. Stabilized fully within the Yehua crest to the level of a single line spell.

Electron Ghost Body (Lightning/Consciousness Transfer)
Rank: B
Cost: 42 Pr (per hour)
Range: 1m
Effect: A type of consciousness transfer targeting modern technology allowing one to possess computer circuitry and thereby control the programs and data contained within. The caster injects a small highly compact electrical mass of prana formed conceptually as an electronic signal into the circuitry of a computer system. Creates a pseudo-familiar body connected to the consciousness of the magus.

With this the caster may perceive, visualize, and effect the information within the computer system. For an ordinary magus this would be worthless, a mass of information that could not be collated. With the use of Amber Translation and Synapse Thought Driver the raw information of the computer may be processed and understood. This is not the complete comprehension of the system but rather extracting necessary information like pulling books out of a large archive. The main purpose is the visualizing of a mental GUI, mirroring the actual interface. Other information can be accessed by scanning different parts of the code by diving back into the raw information and visualizing it to be read. A security feature might be scanned and analyzed to guess its password for example. Thus allowing the caster to cheat in ways that would be impossible for normal users, particularly security systems.

While a superior way to access computers directly it achieves its full potential when combined with a network connection. The caster may extend their prana connection through the network, allowing them to possess other systems remotely. Repeating the analysis of the new system allows for access, in effect hacking the system by being able to read and understand its own code. Strictly speaking this does not allow for the user to do anything absolutely impossible for a mundane operator, but they can bypass restrictions that would require impractical amounts of time or improbable amounts of luck to otherwise accomplish. The user also has no ability to break basic laws relating to computers, a system must be powered to be accessed, a hard-drive installed, a network connection active, software must be installed from a normal source, etc.

The caster's may freely switch between systems they have established access too or even their own body without breaking the spell effect. However dividing their attention this way is difficult, the reactions of their own body are slowed and senses dulled. While accessing a computer system the user is only aware of their body in the vaguest terms, receiving only minimal sensory input. While remotely accessing an active path back to the initial host system through operable systems is required at all times. Something such as a power loss along the path will sever it. Moving the caster's body outside the range of their primary host will also break the connection. Any serious injury will also qualify due to involuntary reflexes. Forcibly ending the spell like this will snap the caster back to their body, causing damage to the nerves leaving them in considerable to extreme pain. Though it is not known to be fatal

Another magus has almost no way to detect or disrupt this spell's use, unless present at the caster's physical location. For a system accessed remotely the caster is not "there" sufficiently to register or be effected. Use of this spell can leave traces however, a normal user of the system might find indications someone moved a file for example or uploaded a program, being a ghost does not mean one lacks fingerprints.

Becomes easier with repeated use as pathways become ingrained in memory and harder with unfamiliar systems. An unfamiliar primary host system might even need to be taken apart and studied before it could be properly targeted. At the other end a familiarity from long term repeated use can bypass Synapse Thought Driver for basic access of a computer with common OSes once a connection is established.

A revolutionary spell first formulated by Hetare's father to actualize the belief that magecraft and technology are not in opposition, and can be combined powerfully. Completed by Hetare herself as her signature spell. She is still exploring the limits. Currently a six line incantation that would be impossible for anyone but a Yehua to learn meaningfully.

High Light Fortress (Lightning)
Rank: A
Cost: 110 Pr +20 Pr (per second, optional)
Range: 50m
Effect: High Thaumaturgy similar in concept to the Flare Bite spell. The magus generates a small very temporary bounded field roughly two meters in diameter around them creating altered atmospheric conditions allowing for the mass generation of highly accelerated energized particles. The hypothetical 'particle cannon' seen in modern science fiction, though the spell predates such concepts among non-magi. The exotic nature of the spell means that the attack does not register as Lightning so some defenses do not apply. For example a defense that works by grounding out electricity would never come into play against this spell as the particle beam impact is more comparable to kinetic energy merely generated and directed by electromagnetic effects.

Manifests as a line of destruction dealing immense damage. Survival of a direct hit at full power is only found among strongest powers of the supernatural. The beam may be reoriented, by rotating on its origin point. The bounded field generating the beam lasts for only a second however by pouring more prana into the spell it can be extended causing further damage. The beam has a diameter of around twenty five centimeters, and may be rotated approximately thirty degrees a second. It may be generated from anywhere in the bounded field, though before the caster's hand or directly over them are most typical. While active Hetare herself is immobile.

Believed to have been developed by an early head of the Yehua family to blast holes in fortifications. Though passed through the crest it has remained challenging to master. Currently a full ten-count incantation.

PLAYER'S NAME: //[/color] Hetare Yehua
FACE CLAIM: //[/color] Tatsumiya Mana (Mahou Sensei Negima)
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Jacob Yehua's Research: Hetare knows nothing close to specifics but the research Jacob had used against him was his attempts to 'clone' his family crest without degrading the original. To enable (in theory) any family to raise as many full heirs as they choose to.

Took the form of trying to alter his youngest daughter while still in the womb, essentially adapting homunculus creation techniques. He actually succeeded, as far as creating a degraded faux-Crest with few circuits and lowered quality. However it contained Yehua family spells with the full stabilization from time much as a normal crest does. He also failed (though this wasn't clear until a few years later) since the construction of this crest was just converting existing natural magic circuits within Sarah while damaging them. So if the full crest was replicated it would drastically reduce the recipient's overall potential. Along with various other dead ends like even higher chances of rejection. Though having survived means Sarah in theory could receive the full family Crest from Hetare without rejection concerns.

Basically an initially promising idea with more drawbacks then expected making it a dead end. Since the creator is dead its lost anyways.

Sarah Yehua: Hetare's sister Sarah is not currently present in Lucca. She has the mentioned synthetic Crest, but neither sibling knows of this. Sarah knows a few basic bits of novice magecraft but that is all. Her faux-crest has not been activated, but the manipulations also brought out the family's mystic eyes.
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[Hetare Yehua]

I'm going to call this justifed use of Hollywood Hacking ready for approval.

[Sola-Ui Nuada-Re Sophia-Ri]

Sorry for the bit of a wait, Technomagus. Flaunting such established traditions, you must be capable of seeing why we let your application sit in the inbox for so long.

Let’s get down to business then, shall we?

First off, we are going to need to know exactly how many years your family has existed as a family of magi, instead of reference to events, such as the fall of Constantinople.

Also you moving around a lot, and your family marrying non-magi would definitely cause an early decay in your lineage, as not only is a family’s power tied to area, but marrying non-magi decreases the overall circuit capacity. With such a high quality in seven generations and around 600 years not only goes against the board rules (“400-700 = 300 at most.” From the Character Pointers, referring first to the age of the family, then the prana count.), but is also impossible for families that practice what you are doing.

Our obsession with Genetics and Lineage is for a reason, after all~

Your sorcery trait does a little too many things. You can create prana batteries along the style of Rin and her gems (Without even using the base spiritual nature of things), become a human taser, power up your electrical spells, and have quite an amazing resistance to electricity for a magus. An Electrical fence can actually make people pass out, and you would have ‘…some discomfort’.

If you keep the battery part, I will also need to know how long it takes to prepare one.

A sealing designation comes from Research, not making enemies. If a Magus discovers something truly new, or worthy of study (such as Touko’s perfect dolls), then they will be designated, and ‘protected’ and their work studied for the good of the Clock Tower. And lifting a Sealing designation is impossible.

In your equipment you mention the Amber Locket. Which can store prana despite not being a battery (But functions as one?), but it is a precious stone, and maybe you can get away with that, but it fuels a spell as a single action? Does this mean you can use this and instantly create High Light Fortress in a single action? If so, that is outright denied.

Also I noticed you have the batmobile or something there.

Moving on to your heretical Magecraft, the first thing I have to mention is +’s are not available for spells. +’s indicated a circumstantial doubling of power. So Chain Lightning, and High Light Fortress need to lose the +s.

Gale Anima: Flight is out of the ability of standard magi, and this spell could easily be used for one minute flight, especially since it can move as fast as the Magus using it. Also, how is it incapable of striking something, if it moves at the same speed as the magus controlling it? Basically this spell will require extensive revision to keep. I would suggest replacing it.

High Light Fortress: While this is very close to two separate spells, this needs more description of what it does. How many Flare Bite spells is it capable of replicating before it runs out of energy? Do the Flare Bite replicas have the full 50m range? You can’t really move a bounded field easily, either, so is it if you move from the 2m diameter inside it? This spell in general is a bit confusing, and lacking in information.

Also Elemental defenses are a magus’ magecraft shields, not magic resistance, correct? Because a normal magus is not bypassing Magic Resistance of a Servant.

Electron Ghost Body: Technically this would also be detectable from the actual computer as well, but the body would be there anyways. A prana connection in transference of consciousness flows in between, and because of the upkeep would likely be detectable if the person is looking for a transfer of consciousness to the computer. Also the denying of reality is worded strangely close to a Reality Marble.

Also if the body is insensate, how does disturbing it snap Hetare back to it? In the end, I’m fine with what this spell does, but it could use a bit of rewording in the Reality Marble sense.

All in all there are quite a few changes needed, but hopefully they aren’t too prohibitive. If you need any explanations I’m on the Cbox fairly often, possibly lurking as I do other things, so drop me a line or some such. Generally an interesting idea behind this, but it stumbles on a few potholes.

[Hetare Yehua]

Thank you for the response I will address these and edit.

First off, we are going to need to know exactly how many years your family has existed as a family of magi, instead of reference to events, such as the fall of Constantinople.

Also you moving around a lot, and your family marrying non-magi would definitely cause an early decay in your lineage, as not only is a family’s power tied to area, but marrying non-magi decreases the overall circuit capacity. With such a high quality in seven generations and around 600 years not only goes against the board rules (“400-700 = 300 at most.” From the Character Pointers, referring first to the age of the family, then the prana count.), but is also impossible for families that practice what you are doing.

Our obsession with Genetics and Lineage is for a reason, after all~

The implication is that they were older but had spotty records and nothing before X point. I will adjust accordingly.

It didn't survive a revision I guess but I was going for a plot point that the Yehua lack of decay was part of their rogue reputation and something that really ticked magi society off. Basically a feature of Hetare's ideology that the whole genetics strangulation is whats causing the decay not the other way around. With supporting evidence of a sort.

Your sorcery trait does a little too many things. You can create prana batteries along the style of Rin and her gems (Without even using the base spiritual nature of things), become a human taser, power up your electrical spells, and have quite an amazing resistance to electricity for a magus. An Electrical fence can actually make people pass out, and you would have ‘…some discomfort’.

If you keep the battery part, I will also need to know how long it takes to prepare one.

Actually I'm going to drop the whole battery part and try to clear up the language. I will adjust the language on the rest, the idea is their trait is for extremely easy Lightning element, so something like the human taser is just that for the family its a completely basic spell like repairing glass.

A sealing designation comes from Research, not making enemies. If a Magus discovers something truly new, or worthy of study (such as Touko’s perfect dolls), then they will be designated, and ‘protected’ and their work studied for the good of the Clock Tower. And lifting a Sealing designation is impossible.

Actually I can make it for something research related. Late occuring ideas

Also I figure like any organization the Association would have politics, and loosers in. And they seem nasty enough to abuse the system a touch. The "lifting" was more loophole abuse and Jacob using up the last cards he had to avoid worse

In your equipment you mention the Amber Locket. Which can store prana despite not being a battery (But functions as one?), but it is a precious stone, and maybe you can get away with that, but it fuels a spell as a single action? Does this mean you can use this and instantly create High Light Fortress in a single action? If so, that is outright denied.

I limited it to 50 prana for that reason, its a "I got thrown off a roof and need to not die" item not a "kill a Servant from behind" item

Its an magical item made with alchemy, used to be common to the family but making them is now lost. Using normal batteries was an inefficient substitute for Hetate because she can't make them.



Also I noticed you have the batmobile or something there.

Moving on to your heretical Magecraft, the first thing I have to mention is +’s are not available for spells. +’s indicated a circumstantial doubling of power. So Chain Lightning, and High Light Fortress need to lose the +s.

Done

Gale Anima: Flight is out of the ability of standard magi, and this spell could easily be used for one minute flight, especially since it can move as fast as the Magus using it. Also, how is it incapable of striking something, if it moves at the same speed as the magus controlling it? Basically this spell will require extensive revision to keep. I would suggest replacing it.

I'll scale it back to a more limited utility spell of some type.

High Light Fortress: While this is very close to two separate spells, this needs more description of what it does. How many Flare Bite spells is it capable of replicating before it runs out of energy? Do the Flare Bite replicas have the full 50m range? You can’t really move a bounded field easily, either, so is it if you move from the 2m diameter inside it? This spell in general is a bit confusing, and lacking in information.

The math for them was in there I thought. The idea for this spell is it generates a bottle of wine, that the caster can then pour as they like. Or chuck the entire thing all at once. Only this bottle is full of destructive energy not wine.

The range for a lesser blast would be reduced I'll make that more explicit as for the method.

And yes its if Hetare moves not the field since the field is immobile. She really can't move more then to change her facing or duck or something either.

Also Elemental defenses are a magus’ magecraft shields, not magic resistance, correct? Because a normal magus is not bypassing Magic Resistance of a Servant.

I was thinking of True Assasin's "Lol Wind! No Sellz!" ability not the general resistance, only for lightning. Effects that would be nullifying the Lightning element specifically not magic. General defenses have full effect.

Electron Ghost Body: Technically this would also be detectable from the actual computer as well, but the body would be there anyways. A prana connection in transference of consciousness flows in between, and because of the upkeep would likely be detectable if the person is looking for a transfer of consciousness to the computer. Also the denying of reality is worded strangely close to a Reality Marble.

Also if the body is insensate, how does disturbing it snap Hetare back to it? In the end, I’m fine with what this spell does, but it could use a bit of rewording in the Reality Marble sense.

I was trying for something weird there (under the idea that Hetare wouldn't necessarily understand why yet) but I can drop it easy enough.

And disturbing Hetare would presumably move her from the computer she is touching, ergo breaking the lines of connection. She generally uses this sitting Indian style with her laptop on her legs. The snap-back is more of a security feature just with a nasty price attached. You could doodle her face with a marker or something like that and she would have no idea. Something that hurt her would get involuntary reflexes going

All in all there are quite a few changes needed, but hopefully they aren’t too prohibitive. If you need any explanations I’m on the Cbox fairly often, possibly lurking as I do other things, so drop me a line or some such. Generally an interesting idea behind this, but it stumbles on a few potholes.

Actually not bad. I toned this down a lot more on my end before posting it already.

[Sola-Ui Nuada-Re Sophia-Ri]

I notice you haven’t edited the profile quite yet, but you have responded, so I’m going to as well.

The implication is that they were older but had spotty records and nothing before X point. I will adjust accordingly.

It didn't survive a revision I guess but I was going for a plot point that the Yehua lack of decay was part of their rogue reputation and something that really ticked magi society off. Basically a feature of Hetare's ideology that the whole genetics strangulation is whats causing the decay not the other way around. With supporting evidence of a sort.

Problem is there is already evidence to the contrary. Families that don’t marry other magi often enough, and move around too much tend to decline or fade out quite quickly. Also I might need to mention this, but all secret plots and things like that should be mentioned in the profile. We’ve had problems with that before, so just making sure. It also pertains to the Electron Ghost, we need to know exactly how it works, even if she doesn’t.

There is a serious reason second sons and daughters are so valuable a commodity in the association. Although that also comes with risks of sharing secrets, and leverage and other such things. So often a second sibling will not even know they are capable of becoming a magus, and just be led to marry who their parents want them to.

Not only that, but moving takes one away from their spiritual land, where they will lose spiritual land. Its not that bad to move around a bit, but most Magi families have a permanent residence in an area to help stave off the decline.

And I’ll wait for your adjustments on the years of the family. Magi would tend to keep good records as well, because their status is partially related to how long they have been around, after all.

Actually I'm going to drop the whole battery part and try to clear up the language. I will adjust the language on the rest, the idea is their trait is for extremely easy Lightning element, so something like the human taser is just that for the family its a completely basic spell like repairing glass.

Well the basic spells are considered just that, repairing glass. The taser kind of has a combat application, and is instant. I could see it being part of a revised trait, perhaps, but the next mod might take issues with it. The trait isn’t a place to jam things in that couldn’t fit in a spell slot, after all.

Actually I can make it for something research related. Late occuring ideas

Also I figure like any organization the Association would have politics, and loosers in. And they seem nasty enough to abuse the system a touch. The "lifting" was more loophole abuse and Jacob using up the last cards he had to avoid worse

A sealing designation pretty much cannot be lifted. While there are politics in the tower (Mostly related to currying favour), if the Sealing was revocable it would not be so feared. Its absolute. Once you recieve it you simply have the two choices of philosopher or hermit. Or running, I guess, but the enforcers are rather... relentless. It’s also not given out easily either. I would suggest either not having a Sealing Designation, or have him just on the run for the rest of his life.

Although the problem with the second one is that you would also have a Sealing Designation, as the inheritor of the crest they would also want to isolate you for study, which would require a few rewrites to your history. We would also need to know what the designation was for at that point.

The math for them was in there I thought. The idea for this spell is it generates a bottle of wine, that the caster can then pour as they like. Or chuck the entire thing all at once. Only this bottle is full of destructive energy not wine.

The range for a lesser blast would be reduced I'll make that more explicit as for the method.

And yes its if Hetare moves not the field since the field is immobile. She really can't move more then to change her facing or duck or something either.

Yes, I misread the spell here. The line ‘Via economy of scale the magus may generate roughly twice the number of Flare Bites for the amount of prana expended against casting the spell’ I read as she could produce new flare bites for half cost, rather than produce… 43 of them while decreasing the power of the field.

Coincidentally, this makes it rather… different than I thought, actually. This is now much closer to two separate spells, but once the original changes I requested (The rank, as well as I will need to know how large the max size beam is) It should be fine with me. Others might have issues with it, however.

I was thinking of True Assasin's "Lol Wind! No Sellz!" ability not the general resistance, only for lightning. Effects that would be nullifying the Lightning element specifically not magic. General defenses have full effect.

So basically it cuts through magecraft shielding in general? Also TA’s shield was a charm against the wind, and if it can stop a phantasm, it’s going to stop a magus’ spell. Comparing attacks to Servant abilities is not a good idea, at least on this board. Magi do not, and cannot, fight Servants without extreme plot. Well they can put up a terrible fight and survive for a short while, but in general anything you do is going to get sent skyrocketing away by a Servant, shortly followed by you. So just try not to compare the two please~

Basically I’m iffy on the cut through shield thing, so I’m going to need more detail on what exactly on a magus this is going to slice through. The main thing is the only A rank shield (I believe) on this board is my character, so as I have a personal stake on that, I’ll pass that part onto the second approver. Hah… hah…

I was trying for something weird there (under the idea that Hetare wouldn't necessarily understand why yet) but I can drop it easy enough.

And disturbing Hetare would presumably move her from the computer she is touching, ergo breaking the lines of connection. She generally uses this sitting Indian style with her laptop on her legs. The snap-back is more of a security feature just with a nasty price attached. You could doodle her face with a marker or something like that and she would have no idea. Something that hurt her would get involuntary reflexes going

Ok then, after a bit of wording change, I’ll be fine with this spell as well. Just be careful using it, not that it’s going to help an incredibly large amount with all those technophobes and data wiping enforcers out there. Still neat and interesting, and hopefully helpful to you.

So once again I’m not really sure if you were ready for a reply, and sorry if you weren't, but once you get all these changes down, I should approve it unless I missed something drastic, or something else comes up in the edits.

[Hetare Yehua]

Okay many edits made but currently completed.

[Sola-Ui Nuada-Re Sophia-Ri]

Ok. I believe that fixed all my problems with this, and sooooooo

[1/3 APPROVAL]

Yeah, you have to get two more. But you are one third of the way there~ Hope to see you in the RP proper soon.

[Hetare Yehua]

I'm prodding this for some further needed approval.

[Gilgamesh]

Right.

Normally, we do have a rule against magi and technology, but I think I'll forgo that, considering how the tech-y stuff is more or less ingrained in her character...

Anyhow.

Anyhow.

I've noticed that you're using age as a basis for her family's great power, which is perfectly normal. However, then you mention emigrating to America, which changes things a little. They'd really have to have messed things up to want to pack bags and flee to America - basically, like everyone else who went there in the first place. Spiritual lands are important stuff, after all.

So when you consider their high magical potential anyways, along with their good standing in the Tower (Before the heretical stuff, that is), it's all a contradictory muck. To the Lords of the Clock Tower, they'd still be seen as hillbillies, even if they're cultured ones.

Really, though, this basically boils down to them being a bit too powerful because of the moving. I'd probably drop the respect and prana count a bit, but nothing special aside from that.

The rest of the history is quite a good read, otherwise. Waver's inclusion is a bit odd, but I'll leave that to the next mod.

Now, to spells.

High Light Fortress... well, considering that most spells are a fire and forget nature, I'd like to see some upkeep cost, considering that you'll also have to maintain the particle balls.

Also, I might have missed it, but how many max-power balls can she make?

Electron Body and hacking:
To be honest, I don't think this works out so well. As it stands, people don't just read binary right off the bat - it'll be hard to translate all of the zeroes and ones into understandable terms. if she just dropped in, she'll be trapped within the grasp the mind of an eldritch being, utterly mysterious and alien in its thought processes. Programmers work off of Java and C++ and whatnot after all, not from scratch. There are a few ways to BS it through, though. Memory Partitioning for hilarious thought processing speeds, for one. problem is that that's for Atlasian Alchemists...

It would make more sense for her to drop one of her spells for some sort of computer scanning spell, sort of like how Shirou was able to check the components of that machine he fixed. One spell to decipher the crap, another to plunge in with her bare mind and do her stuff.

Even so, most, if not all of her functions would be spent trying to wrangle with the computer, but you already have that covered...

Also, needs a rank.

Sorry if Electron Body is a bit of a no-sell at the moment. But hollywood hacking does not exist in real life for a reason.

EDIT: Also, just a thought, but I doubt that she'd have super-leet haxxing powers, considering that she'll have to devote most of her life to magus'y stuff. At that young an age, she's not going to be fabulously good at it. No Justin Longs here, I'm afraid. She'll have to be old and wrinkly to keep her other magus spells and hacking at the same time, or to focus on one or the other.

[Hetare Yehua]

I'm holding off on editing because at the moment I feel almost as if I'd have to scrap the concept and rebuild an essentially different character. As you say the essence of this character is the technological edge.

So barring that I will attempt to address concerns

I suppose first is Electron Ghost Body. I agree humans do not read and convert binary and all the other such mentally, that isn't what I have Hetare doing. You compare to Shirou analysis of objects and here's the thing. That is essentially the wrong way to do things for a magus. Shirou notes that his way is essentially needlessly complicated and Kiritsugu considered it a useless talent. But because Shirou is a no-talent hack he has no choice but to use the one method he can manage.

A magus doesn't have to, they operate more on concept right? A fireball spell doesn't need exacting measures of heat and the chemical reactions in the air that keeps it going. Almost every spell on the standard list can be extremely complex to model in terms of physics even if allowing for things like magic force vectors to drive air into a tornado it. A mage really just wills it into being.

Now go to biological entities and it arguably gets even more complicated. You can have a bird familar and it can fly, a very complicated operation done (as far as I can tell) done more or less on the basis of "that's what a bird does" then beating wings in stable pattern to create X lift in Y air conditions. Even a ground creature can move, something all modern science finds hard to simulate in robotics. And these are basic familars, most Masters (including the much less experienced Waver Velvet) in HF 4 had entire observation nets around the Tosaka, and Matou residences, its how Assasin's fake death was observed.

What does all this have to do with Electron Ghost Body. Well essentially it treats electronic circuits as a familar's body, because they are both extremely complex objects. Hetare doesn't need to do a terrible amount on analysis because what she is doing is more like possessing a familiar. Aided by her Sorcery trait allowing for a lot more precision in her use of Lightning sorcery. She needed to spend years learning mundane computer use to be familar enough with a concept like "data" to be able to make use of it in magecraft. Being able to use the computer comes from the computer being designed for use in the first place, she makes use of the existing principles in the device. This is the real reason she can't simply possess any electrical device she wants.

And while I joke about hollywood hacking Hetare isn't really that. That trope generally ignore basic limitations of computers. She would have a hard time making one blow up by hacking it like referenced movie does repeatedly. Keeping her out of a laptop is as simple as unplugging the local router. And with only a few exceptions she'd be using the system as any other user. I use subjective cyberspace, but if Hetare imagined say a library to substitute the network it opening a book (a computer) would bring up a floating screen of the computer log in. Hetare only gets to break the rules in certain places, she bypasses a password by being able to observe the other side of the login in and see the password needed. To bring this back to familars it would be like moving one leg then the other, its a different muscle in the same complex entity.

From there her hacking ability largely derives naturally. In truth she's nothing special as a programmer without her magecraft, but her hacking is top notch because she has loopholes simply not availible to a mundane. Even then in play she would still take the whole night to raid a bank account, because she has to take (mostly) steps that still make sense. She cannot say, hack a crane to smash open a building for an escape route in real time like another stupid movie. Even if there was such an experimental robo-networked-crane pulling that stunt would need her to scope out it physical position, then spend some time finding it on the net, then more time figuring how its control software worked (which would probably make some very odd movements for people to notice as she tested it) and establish a connection to something that would let her know when it was time to move the crane.... all of which would probably be minimum a nights work for doing it herself, writing up scripting to would take days unless there was such a capability in the crane itself.

However ultimately though the entire point for me of playing a technomagus hacker is to be able to break a few rules, that's the magic part of it. Still in a way that is somewhat sensible (at least as sensible as say manipulating mercury to defend yourself) and grounded with magi/technobabble, but not merely something that's actually possible. Honestly its going to be fairly useless in something like the Grail War.

I built the character around it though to challenge assumptions though. Like technology and magecraft. I've yet to find something that actually puts them in opposition in a meaningful way. Even for the idea of mages rejecting it. While certainly they don't do what Hetare did Waver Velvet knew enough to operate a mobile phone during the battle with Caster lovecraftian monster. Irisviel didn't but if there's a magi family more screwy then the Einzberns we haven't met them. But if I've got the dates right, this was in 1994, when most of us still didn't have the bricks. Kiritsugu was able to get somebody from the Clock Tower to email him. At a larger level, magi travel the world. Bereft of any evidence of some fantastic means they must be using planes and other vehicles. They all are rich and have property, so that means bank accounts in an increasingly electronic service world. And things like tax records. For magi to remain unnoticed with the limits they have on their abilities they have to have been using much of the modern world. Ultimately I bring this up to make the point that the separation of magic and technology is one of philosophy on the part of the mage families, and that Hetare illuminates new possiblities the general Association doesn't to take seriously. With the edge that it going to be harder and harder to maintain isolation if they don't listen to her. Google earth showing a randomly appearing murderous forest for example? Sure low probablities all around, but they rise with time and a Masquerade is much harder to put back.

There's other assumptions that Hetare's character is supposed question. Like the disconnect between the idea of generations getting more powerful as they accumulate, but magecraft decaying. At some level I need her entire history to diverge a bit to give her evidence that her radical beliefs about reforming the Association have at least something to go on. I'm not really comfortable playing someone who's a completely delusional fool.

So she's an American from a family that's moved there and doesn't show obvious signs of decay. Now I'm not looking to override the universe, its entirely possible that Hetare's family is a fluke. A statistical anomaly that wouldn't hold up. And if she got her way for real it wouldn't be some new Age of the Gods for mages, there would be new problems. Mages might survive by adapting, but Hetare really doesn't even consider the underlying fundamentals like Alaya and Gaia which nothing but a major die-off a humanity could much effect.

If the Mage's Association reformed was somehow able to end their Masquerade and operate openly while finding and cultivating aberrant talents like Shirou in greater numbers while staving off their talent decay... they'd likely hasten Gaia's death doing so. Or something to really take the shine off. And more likely they'd provoke open war with the Church trying anyways, which likely has more to do with their current practices then anything else.

Ultimately though I feel I need Hetare be unconventional enough to actually give the idea that things "could" be different some plausibility. I can't write the 'verse in general so I have to confine it to her family, so they have some tradition of rule breaking.

And a final other point, I view Hetare as having merged her tech and magus skills. She needs her tech knowledge to develop the conceptual basis of it and improve it to functioning. And for manipulating it, her magecraft provides her the ultimate GUI but not hollywood hacking requires applying skill. Her other magecraft is all Crest based, she has it and draws it from there. Which is supposed to be a simple thing, among the many advantages of a crest. So the real substance of her active study is like biathlon training, separate skills being used in a merged art. Only this under an academic heading rather then athletic one.

Okay that's my rant. Now to some simpler matters.

More mechanically I would say the Yehuas were never in much regard until Hetare's grandfather who devoted his life to building their status. And much of it would be of the sort "well for an American hick he's not bad. Maybe the Yehua's aren't just jumped up hicks" sort which is why it collapsed so hard. The bit of status before him was more in the interest of preserving the status quo of discriminating on the basis of family lineage, a hillbilly aristocrat fool is still not a commoner. So I can rework the semantics a bit there easy enough.

High Light Fortress. I have it capped a 12 shots explicitly, each of reduced power. And I have it structure along the lines of paying the upkeep in advance. If I add some then that would allow Hetare to end the spell without blowing something up, taking away the main disadvantage of her having to stay in place. Also I feel that would change how the spell works as far as its bounded field. At that point I might as well make it a variable cost spell where Hetare pays for the level she wants. That change is simple enough.

[Gilgamesh]

The concepts start, yes, but the science carries it through, making it easier. But that's usually after multiple generations of refining the same thing. It'll be too much of a problem for one or two generations to make up a spell using that explanation.

Computer programming isn't nearly as imprecise. If I forget to close a > tag or accidentally make a typo while writing up some simple program, then the whole thing crashes. There's absolutely no room for error. It might make sense if she had a few more generations in her family working on the programming, but since that stuff is all too new...

Now, to your familiar analogy...

Familiars are basically dolls. You're not mucking around with their biological impulses or nerves or muscles and all that. You're waving and flailing their arms and legs and what-have-you for locomotion.

And electric circuits are a lot more complicated than legos and dolls. You're not going to be use ToC on a computer and muck around with each and every individual pulse and whatnot by the sheer force of your mind. There's a reason we have calculators - because they work faster.

Her sorcery trait just means that she would know how a lightbulb circuit works - at best. Otherwise, it should just largely be related to the thaumaturgical aspect of lightning. Not that she'll be able to see, let alone understand every single bit and blip of electrical impulse that comes along. Peoples' minds aren't equipped for that. That's why I suggested memory partitioning. The scanning spell was more for a way to comprehend the data, which actually would not work in and of itself since data comes in a constant stream, not chunks and blocks of it.

As for the password thing, that's not how it works. The computer has its own translating algorithm, If my password was puppdog, then the algorithm would turn it to #21h1kj or something like that - which is what you would see. You won't see any puppydogs, and if you tried using that, then you'll be denied, because they don't want the result, but the input. That's how encryption works in the first place.

At the best, Electron Ghost Body won't let her be a ninja in cyberspace. It'll give her a weird and probably more convenient user interface. Problem is that you can't just say "It's magic! I don't have to explain shit!", especially when you're dealing with a direct school of sciences. She's still not going to be able to translate all that binary without 1) some sort of eyes that decipher the binary and 2) mental partitioning to decipher all of these streams of data as they come.

Otherwise it'll all fly over her head faster than the bullets in a decent Danmaku or it'll explode her brain.

In truth she's nothing special as a programmer without her magecraft

But you said in your profile:

Quite aside from her unique talents she could be a lead programmer or software developer for a major corporation.

This is a tad contradictory.

Now, breaking up some rules is fine, but that's just largely societal stuff. I'm fine with breaking social and community rules, but no matter what you do, gravity will always point down. Unless you bring another planet into the equation, but that's a story for another time.

At some level I need her entire history to diverge a bit to give her evidence that her radical beliefs about reforming the Association have at least something to go on. I'm not really comfortable playing someone who's a completely delusional fool.

The only time this works is if you're a Nasu-protagonist, written by Nasu, approved by Nasu, and thought up by Nasu. Otherwise you're just mucking around with canon. You say that you don't want to write the verse, and so "confine it to her family"... except if you do it for her family, then you end up writing the verse anyways. So yeah, this is not happening.

And a final other point, I view Hetare as having merged her tech and magus skills. She needs her tech knowledge to develop the conceptual basis of it and improve it to functioning. And for manipulating it, her magecraft provides her the ultimate GUI but not hollywood hacking requires applying skill. Her other magecraft is all Crest based, she has it and draws it from there. Which is supposed to be a simple thing, among the many advantages of a crest. So the real substance of her active study is like biathlon training, separate skills being used in a merged art. Only this under an academic heading rather then athletic one.

Even if the spells are Crested, they're cheatnotes and study guides. They don't automatically boot up everything. You still have to learn the stuff. I can't transplant the crest onto some kid in the street and watch him cast fireballs the next day. Really, the only spell that works both magecraft and computers together is Electron Ghost Body. And that's the only one that probably would stick as this is.

Sorry to say, while the idea of a hacker that works on a thaumaturgical basis is an interesting one, it will require a large amount of reworking.

[Hetare Yehua]

Reworked my spell line up almost entirely.

[Gilgamesh]

Well, my largest problem would be learning two relatively different disciplines (Combat magecraft and haxmagecraft) at once, but I'll leave that to the next guy.

Otherwise, I'll just have to say that you can't really pass eyes without inbreeding, so if you got rid of that reference, it should be fine. It's not like it's perfectly important for her family to have them through the generations, right?

[Hetare Yehua]

Yes and no, having them informs the family philosophy. However I have edited them down to a very occasional trait within the family.

[Gilgamesh]

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[Hetare Yehua]

Made some minor edits while waiting for my last hurdle.

[Hetare Yehua]

Bumping as this has gone ten days without response.

[Cu Chulainn]

Whoops, sorry about that, I think I missed you because of the entire dorama goings on and all that.

Backstory:
Hmm, Waver would know just how dangerous the Grail War is, and the last Grail War and the one he participated have quite a body count in them. If he’s really fond of the Yehua family, he won’t recommend the Grail War as a ground for proof of ability. Unless of course, he wants to get rid of the Yehua heir to wipe the family out, if that’s your intention feel free to ignore it. If not, just substitute Waver for another Clock Tower higher-ups.

Prana Count:
Well, to be honest, Hetare’s 244 prana natural is a bit abnormal for magi. Her family crest is also greatly under-developed if the family’s a thousand years old family. To be honest, you could just put the 411 prana total in the prana section and bypass this headache, but if you still want to divide the prana like this I recommend switching the crest prana and the natural prana count around.

Synapse Thought Driver:
Overclocking your brain is straining stuff; and the muscle wearing effects also have the potential for wear and tear. You should probably put an upper limit on how long this spell will work. About 10 minutes for the brain and 5 minutes for the physical stuff should be fine.

High Light Fortress:
If it’s a bounded field, then Hetare must be stationary if she wants to cast this spell, no matter how brief the bounded field effect is. No moving bounded field, sorry. Just edit that blurb in and it’ll be fine.

[Hetare Yehua]

Yes by my count there are only two previous Masters in existence, Waver and old Acht. Quite the body count. And the way I see it "fond" would be too much just. Hetare (and myself) imagine Waver is using her to maybe score some points via proxy since they have reasonably compatible viewpoints. If she dies, she dies and its not like he invested anything he cared about. If she survives, hey he benefited (more or less) from doing so, and she would have reason to be an ally/talented-subordinate for him. Or Jacob Yehua pissed Waver off way back, and he wants to off the line for making his own work harder. Doesn't matter to Hetare really.

Now then I simplified the prana count and edited Synapse Thought Driver to have safe use limits. High Light Fortress has always been immobile, Hetare can only pivot the beam about much like aiming it and picking its starting point (within the field) in the first place. I made her immobility more explicit though.

[Cu Chulainn]

Rightio, so the relationship's just business then, good to know.

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