Raven Mist (Master)

[Nina Lüceanu]

Nina Lüceanu



"There's no need for haste. As long as I can observe, I can figure out the mechanism behind this miracle. The Grail, while it is a precious study material, in its present state is useless, cycling too much power to allow any degree of controllability. There are simply too many dependencies, too many variables, and few constants. Thus, there's no possible way to recreate the Third... probably. The Third itself is a theoretical impossibility so this might be a correct procedure, actually. The "Holy" Grail... is boring. But... I want to know more about it. Why has it become like this? What fuels it? It's interesting. Amusing. Even my navel tingles from the sensation. Fufufu."

[/color][/b][/color] Nina Lüceanu
NICKNAMES: //[/color] Raven Mist, Misty, Ravy - but don't call her that
AGE: //[/color] 5(legally, due to a computer mistake)/22(actually)
DATE OF BIRTH: //[/color] February 29, 2004
GENDER: //[/color] female
ALIGNMENT: //[/color] Chaotic Variable [Neutral]. Her demeanor is strictly Giggling Mad, though. Most of the time, anyway.
OCCUPATION: //[/color] NEET, researcher ("mad scientist" type)
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"DAT ASS!" – often said about her; often, these are their final words...

Slightly amused and just a tad insane.
With her (desired) partner.

HEIGHT: //

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WEIGHT: //[/color] 52 kg
EYE COLOR: //[/color] brown
HAIR COLOR: //[/color] black
PIERCINGS: //[/color] -
TATTOOS: //[/color] Her Command Spells are situated around her navel and have the form of three sharp-edged petals "growing" out of her belly button. Using them makes her feel good. At least, she says so.
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES: //[/color] black wings on her head; dat ass!
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"She might seem weird at first bit don't let that trick you. The truth is, she's much weirder than she might seem." - those who have more than a 20 point difference in IQ with her, as in, most people here in Lucca don't know her all that well.

• Deadpan Expressionless
  
  • Her face retains the slightly bored appearance with droopy eyes in most situations. If she's really agitated, though, her expression might change drastically.
  
  
• Excitable
  
  • Though it doesn’t show on her face, Nina is easily gets excited over the most casual things. She’s lived most of her life in seclusion so many things that normal people are used to are completely new to her. Ice-cream is a fine example.
  
  
• Troll Consummate Liar
  
  • She has a penchant for telling blatant lies and often blows things out of proportion, especially about her background. Worst of all, no one can really tell whether she's lying or not, due to her usual lack of expression. Once, she was seen with her grandfather in one of the research institutions of the Sea of Estray and was mistaken for his lover due to her choice of words. It might be a false rumor. She thought it's amusing and went along with it. Maybe...
    
  
  
• Self-absorbed
  
  • She doesn't really have a care in the world and is prone to losing sight of her surroundings, especially when something (or someone) piques her interest. She's likely to space out when an idea "strikes" her, as a true researcher should. Also, she's usually unaware of how the other side feels about her actions which leads to the next point.
  
  
• Stalker
  
  • She has little experience in interpersonal relationships except for her interaction with old Raven Mist. Even then, most of their conversations were about magecraft. If she takes an interest in someone, she will end up stalking them, harassing them, and might even attack them if bored. If she’s discovered she'll turn everything into a joke and make her exit. Of course, she'll be back the next day. On the other hand, she's as likely to help them if need arises.
  
  
• Deranged Weird
  
  • It'll be safe to say that whatever experiments she's been conducting lately, they weren't safe for her mental health. Not really, but her usual demeanor makes her appear unstable. The image is further complemented by her language. She isn't used to speaking Italian. No, first of all, she isn't used to speaking. Her sentences are generally short, sometimes too short to understand her point. She often pauses mid-sentence and usually speaks disjointedly, sometimes almost incoherently. Moreover, she often forgets what part of her thoughts she's said out loud, and which she hasn't, making it even harder to follow her train of thought. She also likes to laugh. Well, at least, she tries. Most of the time, it comes out as creepy, desultory giggles. When she concentrates, she can speak intelligibly, and her sentences become overly complex instead (Slav languages make much more use of complex sentences than English... or Italian, for that matter).
  
  
• Cold-blooded and Calculating
  
  • Behind the slightly insane facade lies a cold heart. She's got her priorities set, and she won't allow morals hinder her. She'll have no qualms about involving innocents, but won't allow her Servant feed on humans as she sees this as a kind of dependency.
    
  
  

LIKES: //

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Laughing (though it makes her look even more like a raving lunatic)
"Amusing" things
Strong people
Magic duels
Magecraft in general
Cooking (as in, to cook and the process of cooking itself)
Ice-cream
Her Magic Crest
Throwing knives
Darts

DISLIKES: //[/color]
Dependencies
Weak-willed people
People who use others' strength for their own
Comments about her rear - it's her Berserk Button
Her Magic Crest ('cause it's in Romania right now, when she needs it)
Things her body "isn't meant for"

STRENGTHS: //[/color] Nina is fast and nimble, in both body and mind. She also has high stamina which makes her a good runner, which can be useful when pursuing an enemy or escaping from danger. More important is her mental discipline. She's been taught nothing but magecraft since early childhood and it turned out she likes magic duels more than experiments. So, basically, that's what she's been doing. Now, she's a practiced spellcaster with superior strategic insight on everything related to magical combat. Lastly, she doesn't fear death (she has taken precautions; scroll down to the ‘Doll’ in the equipment section for details) so she'll keep her cool in most situations, and her concentration cannot be disrupted by any mental interference or pressure created by killing intent.

WEAKNESSES: //[/color]Her high stamina and good speed are the only good points regarding her physical prowess. Nina doesn't have much experience in close combat. Basically, she will be at a disadvantage in a brawl against most opponents. Then, there's her... umm... weird personality that makes her hard to approach, so she's unlikely to make allies. Her most serious weaknesses, though, is her disregard for her own life (she has taken precautions).
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MY FAMILY LINE: //

[/color] Lüceanu aren't a well-known family, mainly because their family name often changed throughout history. Their roots go as far as the 12th century, making them well over 800 years old. Their Magic Crest was once lost in the 14th century, so the generation count is lower than you'd think, Nina being the 10th family head.

They are an odd family that often changed their field of study, making their powers seem rather inconsistent. Moreover, they never suffered from the main weakness of most old families: pride. Because of this, they were always looked down upon at the Clock Tower and generally ignored, despite their brilliance. Not that they cared much, as few of them studied there. Their main base of operations is the Sea of Estray. Here, they are widely known as a family of "mad mages", eccentrics who simply do whatever they feel like. Still, individual researchers often cooperate with them as the Lüceanu are random geniuses (as in, they're random, but generally successful at whatever they do). Their biggest problem is that none of their projects lasted more than 2 generations so they never made any groundbreaking discoveries.

The previous head of family and the original Raven Mist was best known for his research of immortality. In the span of roughly sixty years he helped two magi become vampires, though one of them was recently killed for good. Obviously enough, his own version was that "he used the results of my research to further his own". Thus, the Church left him alone, though he was still deemed "an individual to be observed", along with everyone else who had contacts with the heretic. [1] Exactly how far his own research has gone, no one knows. Except for Nina. Probably. Aside from this branch of research, he is known to have developed a rather powerful spell, "Shadow Mist" (his workshop is surrounded by a semi-permanent variation of this spell, sustained in the form of a bounded field).

Lüceanu have wonderful fledging circuits with an average quality of about 12 PrC. The average amount tends to fluctuate much but the general tendency is that at least one child in three generations will have an outstanding quantity. This peculiarity can be seen as a Sorcery Trait; it has been referred to in the family as “Meridian Arc”, though the reason for this naming has been long since forgotten (most likely, someone tried tying the appearance of “blessed” children to the positions of the stars at the time of conception; the theory fell through but the name remained). Such prodigies are the ones who usually succeed the Magic Crest. In "normal" generations the expected amount is 6-10 circuits but it's three times as much in a "blessed" generation. This family is expected to grow much stronger in the future.

As the Lüceanu often change the direction of their research they don't have a strict thaumaturgical specialization. Also, due to their eccentricity, they never concentrated on a single direction for their spells, meaning a Lüceanu could develop a means of genocide and adapt it into a mundane utility, never realizing the potential lethality of the spell.

If someone tries searching for any peculiarities in their methods, they might notice that that their research had lately been producing an unexpected amount of results in just one or two generations. It can be hand-waved by saying that Raven Mist was a genius but that wouldn't explain everything. Lüceanu have a lot of "trifling" data left over from the previous generations. They possess one of the most extensive private libraries in Eastern Europe. Much of the research was abandoned every time the next heir considered it too boring to continue. As time passed, the fields of study started overlapping with certain projects of their ancestors. As such, the apparent progress can now exceed expectations of those who don't know of these details (which is pretty much everyone outside the family).

MY HISTORY: //[/color] Normal life? I don't know what you consider "normal". My childhood was normal. As far as I can tell. I didn't know any other so... it didn't seem out of ordinary.

I lived with my grandpa. For as long as I remember. I don't remember living with my parents. But they visited. Sometimes. We have a large house in the mountains. It is always surrounded by mist. It made me feel sick so I tried to stay indoors. It was better in the rooms. There was a library, so I wasn't bored even when he wasn't there. The lady that prepared our food... still does... it seems cooking was her only... interest? No... umm... Vocabulary... dictionary... Don't have it... Seemed like she... umm... was created for cooking. And only that. We didn't talk much. I remember grandpa saying. She's a present from a friend. There was nobody but us so sometimes we talked. But it was always about cooking.

Most of the time, I read books. Grandpa had many books about... um... voca... don't have it... um... about things. There was much I didn't understand so I had to ask grandpa. He wasn't always around so sometimes I had to figure it out myself. By reading other books.

When I grew up a little and stopped asking as many questions, grandpa started teaching me... umm... things... himself. He said I had great potential. More than being with him, though, I liked doing things myself... When I couldn't understand something that I saw in a book... or just felt like doing something... I'd try it myself. Practice helped me understand. There were things I couldn't do, though. Grandpa said that my body isn't meant for these things. He gave me some books where the difference was explained. He was pleased with my enthusiasm. But then said I shouldn't do such things without him. So I stopped. Well, actually, I didn't. Grandpa was away much of the time. So after some time I returned to experimenting alone. Sometimes I had Maria... the cooking lady... help me. Grandpa got angry. When he found out. I apologized and promised not to do it again. But he said all I had to do was ask permission first.

Then he brought another man with him. And said I can play with him all I want. The man was Petre. He was boring. He would read books from grandpa's collection most of the time... I guess I was boring too, then. But books are interesting so I kind of understood him. We got along like that. Petre was weird. He wouldn't go out during the day. Said sun's bad for his skin... But he often went out at night. He seemed to enjoy walking in the mist around our house. How can you like that stuff? Well, another man was fun to have around. He was experienced and would often show me something new. With his help, I improved quite a lot. Grandpa still asked me what I learned from him, and he sometimes got angry at Petre after that. He would gather all three of us and show how the deed is done correctly. Grandpa had much more experience, and was... more gifted than Petre, in most areas. Petre had better stamina, though. He lasted longer. He recovered quickly, too. But grandpa had better technique, definitely. Petre loved these lessons. Even though grandpa often used him as punishment.

Well, that is what my childhood was like. It was normal. What do you mean, "stop joking around". A~h. This is boring. So I tried to make the story more interesting. I overdid it? He-he. That reaction. It's amusing. He-he~.

I only knew about the outside world from books. Not all of Grandpa's books were about magecraft. But those were the most interesting. When grandpa took me with him, it was boring. There was many talking. People talked about boring things. I wasn't interested in the outside back then... I think I might have changed now. Ice-cream is good. There are many amusing things to see. And feel. I don't think I'll be going back home after this.

Um... Some 5 years ago... Grandpa came back in good mood. No. That's wrong. He was... umm... ecstatic, overjoyed. He spoke incoherently. Even more so than usual. About immortality, about the Third magic... and about this land. You see, grandpa was obsessed with his research. It was cute. He. He-he. He studied the soul. And the body. He searched for immortality all his life. He had friends in the Sea. It seems he knew long before that. That the Einzberns were planning this. 10 years. Maybe more. He was often away... I already said that. But when he was at home, he would often experiment. It was interesting to watch. But at some point the experiments changed. They became... dangerous. Um... He postponed his research. He was scary at the time. This part is boring. I'll skip it.

Grandpa died. He was old. He called himself a fool. Guess he meant his obsession. He asked me to continue his research. Immorta~li~ty~. It's interesting. So I agreed. He seemed satisfied... That's why I am here now. That was... over 2 years ago, now. After grandpa died, I was sad. I started spending most of my time with Maria. She was the only one around. I learned a lot of... things... with her help. These were very unlike my lessons with grandpa... Huh? I'm doing it again? ...Whatever. Umm... Yeah.

Some time later, two men came. Petre... and I didn't know the other one. Petre was sad, just like me. The other man... ah, he introduced himself as Nicolay. He didn't look like one, though. He was another friend of grandpa's. It seems. They told me about this ritual... they called it a war. They were boring so I didn't listen much. Then Maria said it would be a chance for me. I guess she meant "a chance to study Italian cuisine firsthand". She rarely spoke about anything unrelated to cooking.

I though that now that grandpa is not here anymore, there is no point in staying. I wanted to go somewhere immediately but Nicolay proved to be interesting. He said he can make another body for me. I was amused... Well, he tried his best. I wish he'd improve some areas so that I would be able to try new... things. Hmm~. It's not that bad, though. It's satisfying. Nicolay taught me many things with this new body, as well as before that. I tried some of them on Petre later... He isn't normal. It seems he enjoys being penetrated over and over again. I'd die from something like that... What was that facepalm for? Is my English that bad? Well, I learned... A-a~h! Magecraft... That was the word. I learned some interesting magecraft, and tried some spells on Petre. He's a Dead Apostle. He wouldn't die from something like that. I still tried to go easy on him. I felt sorry for hurting him at first. But he seemed to like it. Petre had always been weird like that. Um... So that's it. I learned what I thought would be most useful. I may be slow on the attack but making this trinket *points at Wings* was the correct choice.

MY GOALS: //[/color] "I don't... have a wish... I'd want granted. Right now. I'll reach my goals with my own power. And knowledge... he-he... if I can obtain such fine study... material... Where was I? ...Ah, why should I pass... on such an opportunity? Moreover, this town is full. Of fools, but... Some are amusing. He-he~"
She doesn't want the Grail's power, thus, she won't actively search for opponents unless she gets really bored. Her priority is locating the Grand Holy Grail and studying it. She'll also take this chance to learn some orthodox magecraft, as she had only ever known the teachings of her grandfather.
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Doll.[2] The body she uses now is an artificial container. The link with the original body still exists, so if the doll is destroyed she'll wake up back in Romania. She will, however, lose her Command Spells and her link with the Servant she was contracted to. This container is a copy of her, created by one of her grandfather's friends, namely Nicolay.
The copy itself isn't on Touko's level and has slightly inferior magic circuits. Since this is a fake body, it doesn't have the Lüceanu Magic Crest. Thus, she cannot use her stronger spells to their full potential.
Lastly, this doll will expire in about a year, anyway, so she won't be troubled if it gets destroyed.

Raven Wings. A simple yet skillfully made Mystic Code that has the shape of a pair of wings. It allows Nina to streamline a single spell. She usually carries it on her head as an accessory.
(More info in the spell slot.)

Knives. A stock of throwing knives. She usually carries 6 of these with her. And don't ask where she hides them. I have no clue, either.

Romanian-Italian Dictionary. Pretty self-explanatory.

RANK: //[/color] unranked, the Clock Tower never even heard of her.

ELEMENT: //[/color] Wind

EXPERTISE: //[/color]

Magical Combat. Having years of practice and a lively mind, she can quickly come up with a strategy that guarantees a decent rate of success even in the direst situation. For example, she's able to always choose the most advantageous position in battle.

Jack of All Trades, Master of None. The Lüceanu family had often changed their field of study. As a result Nina has studied more spheres of magecraft than most other magi but her knowledge in each of these fields is not as deep as that of the families that have narrow specializations.

Thrown weapons. More specifically, knives and darts. Nina is able to reliably hit a target the size of a human torso from 10 meters away. She picked up this skill to reduce her own dependence from magecraft.

MAGIC CIRCUITS: //[/color] Nina is a gifted (though not “blessed”) magus from an old family. She has 37 magic circuits (16 inborn, 21 in her Crest) and an average overall quality of 12 PrC. Her maximum is prana 444.
Well, that's her original body. The doll has slightly inferior circuits: the number is the same as Nina’s inborn quantity but the average quality is at 10 PrC. Oh, and obviously, no crest. Her maximum in this body is prana 160.

SPELLS: //[/color]

Raven Wings (Wind, Ether)
Rank: D
Cost: 30 Pr + 3 Pr/min
Range: self
Effect: A barrier that can be activated with a single action. It manipulates the nitrogen in the air around Nina into an unnoticeable to the naked eye but concentrated layer around her body. It cannot be breached by E and D rank spells and can withstand a single C rank spell. It can also block physical objects like arrows and thrown weapons (those thrown by a normal person; a reinforced magus will have enough strength to pierce the barrier) but is helpless against bullets and the like. A rapid barrage of low-rank spells can also potentially breach her defense but honestly, it'll be easier to just shoot her (you'd have to spam Gandrs like Rin a machine gun to do this) because the shield mends itself if given a breather between the attacks. It should also be noted that the protection doesn't cancel out spells completely but only protects Nina from them. So a spell with an AoE will still have an effect on her surroundings.
The protection can be held up for an indefinite amount of time as long as enough prana is supplied.

!This is an application of the Raven Wings Mystic Code. The effect cannot be created without it.


Raven Wings - Overclock (Wind, Ether)
Rank: B
Cost: 60 Pr + 1 Pr per 5 sec
Range: self
Effect: A strong barrier that can be activated with a one-liner. It manipulates the nitrogen in the air around Nina into a unnoticeable to the naked eye but concentrated layer around her body. It cannot be breached by spells of rank C and below (except for an extremely rapid barrage of these, but honestly, it'll be easier to blow her up because the shield mends itself if given a breather between the attacks) and can withstand up to 2 B rank spells. It can also stop bullets, except for armor piercing or really high caliber rounds. However, it cannot block, or even halt, A rank spells.
At this rank the shield can only be sustained for 5 minutes. Also, activating it causes damage to the code, rendering it unusable. Nina will need 2 days to fix the item after using this variation of the shield.

!This is an application of the Raven Wings Mystic Code. The effect cannot be created without it.


Razor Gale (Wind)
Rank: D
Cost: 14-18 Pr
Range: 28m
Effect: Prana is used to manipulate the atmosphere into a vacuum that can julienne a target quite effectively in a barrage of 'sharp' gusts capable of cutting through kevlar, leather, wood, and most 'light' materials. Each barrage consists of 7 gusts, costing 2 Pr each. During the initial casting, it's possible to contribute an additional 4 Pr to the spell, which will cycle the air and allow the user to cast it again in a single action manner. The result is a quicker follow-up of barrages that can potentially end up with a target shredded to bits, assuming the caster has enough prana to keep up the attack.

A three-line spell that is taught at intermediate levels, older families with this in their Crests have stabilized it to the level of One-Liner.
Nina has to use the full incantation even in her original body as her family never bothered to include this spell into their Crest.

Razor Gale is frequently attributed to the Barthomeloi, though there are several other families who claim to be responsible for its creation. The fact that the Barthomeloi neither confirm nor deny these allegations makes the other claimants more confident in their insistence that they invented it. Unsurprisingly, however, the heads of these families tend to end up being assigned to some of the most demeaning positions in Clock Tower, such as Director for the Department of Familiar Registry, or Vice Director for the Department of Sanitation.


Basic Alteration (Ether)
Rank: E
Cost: 5 Pr
Range: Touch
Effect: Nina at least bothered to learn a way to restock her throwing knives without too much hassle.
Using alteration, a makeshift throwing knife or a dart can be created in the timeframe of 3 seconds after the chanting, given that the necessary material is available, because of Nina's familiarity with the desired object. Other shapes and well-balanced knives/darts will require marginally more time (as in, it becomes unsuitable for use during battle). Also, she can only create relatively simple objects at her level of skill.
This is a one line spell.


Jovis Tempestas Fulguriens (Wind, Lightning)
Rank: B
Cost: 77 pr
Range: 40 m line in a single direction
Effect:
Windstorm of Lightning. This spell creates a spiral torrent of wind and lightning that destroys everything (it can) in its path. It works on principles similar to Perunić but the effect is much more concentrated so the potential damage and general output are higher. The lightning component is weaker, only reaching 0,6 Megawatt but the wind is stronger and more focused, and the hit is comparable to a collision with the Shinkansen at full speed. -ahem- The result is an attack that electrocutes the enemy and blows them away (and resembles a toppled over tornado that quickly dissipates more than anything else).
Because of its "drilling" effect it is very effective against constructs, like golems and storehouses.
This spell requires the full three verse incantation because Nina doesn't have the Crest in this body.

PLAYER'S NAME: //[/color] ferian
FACE CLAIM: //[/color] original art by redjuice
OTHER CHARACTERS: //[/color] Honda Tadakatsu, Uesugi Kenshin (W2), Yang Wen Li (W2), Howard Phillips Lovegod Byakuya (W2), Cyril the Furrier (W2)
MISC. INFORMATION: //[/color] Partner of Xenophon

[1] Why wasn't he apprehended back then? The answer is simple. The heretic had contacts with several magi, including Raven Mist. I stated that he helped that guy but the same can be said about other magi who had contacted him on a regular basis. Once the Church disposed of the vampire and his research they deemed every such magus potentially dangerous, not just Raven Mist. The Sea of Estray is far more chaotic than the Clocktower and such incidents probably happen more often here. If the Church burned everyone associated with every new heretic they take down there would likely be no Sea of Estray by now.
The other one, namely Petre, hadn't had any problems hiding his nature up to now.

[2] This is more of a plot point tied in with her participation in the war. It is Nicolay's "insurance", so to say, because the Doll has a limited "lifespan" and he has Nina's real body. Oh, and the Doll works the same way as Araya's/Touko's fake bodies. I'm sorry if my crappy wording had caused some misunderstanding.
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[Nina Lüceanu]

I've been ready for criticism for some three days now. Still waiting...

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Sorry about that. I've been rather lethargic as of late. Just to clarify, you don't need to wait three days before posting that your character is ready. Again, I apologise for the misunderstanding.

I'm still feeling rather down at the moment, though, but I'll point out what strikes me most. I can't allow you to have the shadow alignment. That is an affinity unique to Matou Sakura, and thus, is not available for use. High Speed Aria is also not available for use, as it is a special skill unique to Magicians.

Also, please adjust your display name to reflect your full name. The policy does not cover nicknames.

[Nina Lüceanu]

Shadow affinity was sort of a cornerstone for this character. I cannot just scrap the whole concept without a fight... Is there any possibility for compromise here? As I recall, this trait wasn't "unique", just very rare. That's why I made it part of her family's trait.

Aozaki Aoko is the only stated user of High Speed Aria. That doesn't mean only magicians can use it. Moreover, I don't see how this skill can be limited to them, as it is basically accelerated chanting, accelerated self-suggestion. This can be achieved by regular training. If you insist, though, I'll remove it and weaken the shadow lances (they're single action mostly due to this skill).
Lurked around, got the point. Removed High-Speed Aria, added Spell Development instead. I hope there won't be any objections to this one.

About the name, Raven Mist is the name she'll be using in this War. Yes, her passport states "Nina Luceanu" but that's a "trifling matter" to her. As far as she is concerned, she is Raven Mist. If you insist, I'll change the name. It's just that this might cause some unnecessary confusion.

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Shadow is unique. Now for the purposes of the RP, even if it were extremely rare, we would consider it unique, as it allows abilities that can be used very effectively against Servants. This is not the kind of game that will have masters running around defeating Servants one on one with Unlimited Blade Works, or even "putting up a good fight", for the matter. That being said, it will take a Servant to stand up to a Servant.

I know it will be difficult to rework your character concept based on this limitation. Which is why I will offer you my assistance in doing so.

With regards to the name, perhaps you should instead put Raven Mist up there, in that case along with Nina Lüceanu.

[Nina Lüceanu]

She would be able to survive a fight with a Servant at the cost of emptying her prana reserves, at most, even with the shadow affinity.
I guess I'll have to get rid of Shadow Mist. I'd like to retain some form of it, maybe weaker. Something like "soul decay". The basic concept should be a poisonous mist that weakens enemies and takes a lot of time to cast. A-rank spells should work on Servants, anyway. I don't have any idea how to work my way around the shadow affinity part.
One idea, though it will probably be turned down: I can change her Sorcery Trait to "Counter-Element" which would mean that her spells are more effective against a certain element. Then her affinity would be something along the lines of "Ether Decay" - I'm ready to sacrifice Air for that. It won't be nearly as strong as shadow, and will handicap her own attack spells, as the sorcery trait will get in the way.
Now that I lurked around some time, though, I think she may be overpowered if both the mist and the mystic code stay (I judged the general level by earlier approvals, which were... overpowered, every second of them having Mystic Eyes and such). But if I remove the mist, she'll have no means of attack at all... Her shadow lances will be removed, too, after all. I can make them "air lances" or something, but that will be simply a diversion: they wouldn't be able to deal lethal damage, but the speed factor and the fair amount of prana used to create a "presence" will force the enemy to dodge, breaking their attack and giving Nina a chance for a comeback, or to retreat.
In the end, I'd like to keep an effective counter-spell even more than the mist. Duels are her specialization, after all.
These are just ideas. I'm actually quite lost as to what to do.
Back to the drawing board, I guess.

P.S. Didn't you say you were feeling unwell? Don't push yourself. I'll sort this out in a few days. I'll have to do a lot of tweaking, though.
P.P.S. Please tell me now: can I have both Raven Wings and a rank A spell, if the spell isn't of direct attacking type?

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Well I don't really mind an A-Rank spell. Most people here would have one anyway. As for the wings, I'll have to check them out in a few hours.

[Nina Lüceanu]

Okay, version 4.0 up. Hope this doesn't get shot down instantly.
In the end, I got rid of the A-rank spell. It would be impractical to balance its use with Raven Wings.
About the Mystic Code: made it somewhat weaker because now Nina lacks shadow affinity, clarified some points.
Also, I'm thinking of adding that fifth spell. It should be a direct attack type that's bound to be fatal to an unprotected magus. C or B rank, most likely, of the air element.
For now, ready for round two after an instant knockout. Good thing this isn't boxing.

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

1)The DA in your backstory is fine, as long as he does not show up in the RP.

2)Your dolls. Why does she even do this, and does she get to make things like this during the war? While not on the level of Touko, we aren't sure if we want to allow this or not.

3)Your Mystic Code is reproducable... perhaps make it an enchanted item/inherited item rather than a mystic code, since mystic codes are supposed to be patterned after the user/become patterened after the user at that level of strength. Even if they don't they are near irreproducable without some level of insane work, such as the reproduction of the Gem Sword. Kiritsugu IS his mystic code. So is El Melloi I, and those are created by them. With such a powerful mystic code you need to elaborate on how you learned to use it, if you keep it at such a level.

4)Your Sorcery Trait is odd, perhaps convert it into a spell. Not only that, you need to elaborate what sort of details it gives about the spell one is analyzing.

5)You have a few missed edits throughout your profile about the shadow element.

6)There are no + or - modifiers for spells. This is a problem with wind blade, as well as your counterspell. They are all over the place in your spells. This is a part that needs to be revised before continuing

7)Wings(Mystic code) are too easy/cheap to make more of/repair for their effects. Also there should be a limit of wings, perhaps two, since one of them can block C rank spells.

They also still draw on the shadow element.

8)Your element should probably go to ether/air, as that change will not effect the ways your spells work currently, and counter-ether is shadow.

9)Flight(Mystic Code): Flight is something I'm on the fence on, to be honest. I'll have to roll about for a consensus on its permissibility.

10) Your D rank air lance is problematic at best. As it is written, casting it guarantees a hit on any magus. Every single one, since apparently it requires B Agi to dodge. Servant rank B agi. Not to mention it somehow scares people into dodging it. I'm not quite sure how that works. It needs more explanation, perhaps you can 'fake' overloading it with prana.

11)Cancelling Wind: +s again. Can't make a spell a - rank. Needs more detail on how it works. What can she take out with this. Stable things? Or just direct prana manipulations? Like freezing a puddle of water is a naturally caused interference, what would she counter here? The whole thing is very confusing, and when stripped of +'s and minuses might make more sense.

12)Ether Hex is too much interference. A magus would be able to wash away this curse easily.

[Nina Lüceanu]

That's a lot. But a lot less than I expected.

1) He won't show up as he's scared of the Church agents. That's one of the reasons he and Nicolai sent Nina here. At most, she might contact them when she's at a safe location to gather some info on the participants. Those two know quite a bit about the magi from the Sea of Estray, but little about those from other places.

2) Not dolls, doll. She wasn't the one who made it, and she cannot repeat the process. Her forte is closer to the soul, not the body. That's why she is able to use this doll.
This doll was made so that those two guys have sort of a "hostage". It was made to expire within 3 years, and there's only 14 months or so left. They plan to bargain the safety of her original body for the Grail.

3) Sorry, forgot about that bit. Just the creation of Raven Wings took her grandfather over 2 years, and he had the idea for quite a long time before that. She cannot reproduce it as she doesn't have the shadow element anymore.
About the pattern, it was all well when she had the shadow element but now it's icky. I guess I'll change it to an inherited item then. About the use, I wrote that she fused it with the doll's body, sacrificing three magic circuits in the process (one for the core and one more for each allowed wing).

4) Do you mean "Spell Development"? That is not a trait but her field of expertise. Magecraft was pretty much the only thing she learned. She can recognize standard spells instantly from the preparations, except for the prana input when it's variable. In case of non-standard spells, she will be able to discern the spell level and it's main elements mid-incantation, or upon it's release if she misses the incantation (or if it's a single action spell). In case of unique spells that follow a popular pattern, the insight is pretty much the same. In case of most family-specific spells, she will only discern the level after the spell is completed, but the main elements will still be revealed mid-incantation. She also has a fair chance to notice hidden effects if the obvious effect follows a popular pattern.

5) Oops. Though the only part I missed was in Cancelling Wind. Raven Wings should remain as is.

6) ... Huh? There aren't? Oops, I guess. I got carried away with the dice. Okay, I'll remove them. That will make things easier for me, too.

7) There is a limit of two. Additional ones require a ritual to produce (the spell can only reproduce a shattered wing) and will require the sacrifice of additional circuits. I made that possibility in case she has to duel someone like Barbie and knows it beforehand. I can impose a limit of one reproduction with the spell, with next ones requiring the extended treatment. Will that work?
About the repairs: I tried to balance them to the best of my ability, so I'll need to ask how much should they cost from your POV?
About the shadow element: I left it on purpose, since that's the only way I could think of to make them work the way they do. ...I guess I can remove it, though. It's just that the wings consist of the shadow element, coated with the air element, thus they have substance, as in, they're material; if it doesn't have the shadow element, materialization can only be achieved via projection, as far as I know. ...Or with the demonic element, but that's way out in left field. Are there other possibilities I've overlooked?

8) I'm fine with switching to Air.

9) I also hesitated on that point, but I'd like to keep this ability. Please let me keep it. I'm ready to sacrifice two spell slots for this item instead of one.

10) It worked as Shadow Lance because shadow creates stronger presence. It's enough to have Agi D and Instinct D to do successfully dodge it. It'll be more problematic if they don't dodge, actually, as the spell practically doesn't deal damage. If it hits, the enemy will be certain that they're safe even if they come within range. The main idea of the spell is to cause an instant distraction and win time for her next move. It also has a high cost in comparison and a fair chance to miss even if the opponent doesn't dodge (both of these are tricks to further shake the opponent; something like, "if that spell creates that much presence and is that hard to control, it should be dangerous... I better stay away for now.")
Could you please elaborate on what you mean by '"fake" overloading it with prana'? I'm not sure I understand.

11) By pluses/minuses I meant how the power of the spell would change, in accordance with the dice numbers. I can simplify everything to something along the lines of this,

Cancels spells at and below its level if there is enough prana channeled; otherwise, it has a chance of reducing the spell's effectiveness based on the difference in spell levels and prana costs. For B rank spells, it decreases their effective level by a rank if there's enough prana

12) It was supposed to work like a sort of "ether decaying acid". I guess I'd need shadow (or the True fifth element but that's WAY out in left field, lol) to achieve that. Oh, and it suddenly hit me that its effect is similar to that of Kiritsugu's bullets... Okay, I'll think of changing it.

I'll probably go around modifying the profile on Sunday. I have exams up to New Year's so I don't have much time right now except for that day.

[Nina Lüceanu]

He-he~. I lied.

1) Removed the Sorcery Trait. Now that I think of it, it was needed only for Shadow Mist variations. Since I've given up on this, there's no need to make Nina a freak of nature.

2) Changed the repair rate of the wings. The repairs are automatic but much slower, so two consecutive C-rank strikes can shatter one wing now.

3) Removed Ether Hex.

4) Added that "sure-kill" spell, Jovis Tempestas Fulguriens.

5) Added some more information about Cancelling Wind, removed the pluses.

If there is anything else, please let me know soon. I'm free till Monday.

edit: Changed the part about using the wings as a physical weapon. Since the repairs are automatic and have a fixed rate, the mention of it had to be removed.

[Illyasviel von Einzbern]

Ok. Personal issues up first, sorry I didn’t get to these last time.

1)If someone tries searching for any peculiarities in their methods, they might notice that that their research had usually produced more results in just one or two generations than some families' progress in the whole time-frame of their existence.

This is a no, even if for flavour. It also makes no sense either. They aren’t hugely focused in their progress… so they manage to make more progress than anyone else? Being a genius is not a hereditary trait, and the fact that you can match any specialist family with dabbling over a generation is far too much.

2) Whether the Church will leave your grandfather alone or not is a bit of a grey line at the moment. Debatable, because they did leave Zelretch alone, but that's Zelretch. We'll need more information about what became of the remaining living DA's, to see if the church would take action or not.

3) Unfortunately, no. If souls could be shared and controlled like that, Araya would still be alive. She can have the same trait as Touko. Her soul may go back to her original body in case the doll dies, since Araya also used that feature, just that she need to be reminded that if the doll dies, even if she is still alive, she is out of the war as the Command Seals will remain on the dead doll.

4) Your spell development expertise makes no sense. This is not something easily grasped, even with practicing with dead apostles. Your age, training, and the other skills you have do not mix well with this. Also, words no longer contain power, so how does the chant reveal anything about the spell? Chants are personal self hypnosis, not something information, other than length, can be gleamed from. Prana does not reveal all the details of a spell either, instead it is just detectable where it is.

Even if a spell can be learned over time by repeated observance/attempts, this is approaching pure eyes territory perhaps, rather than any learned skill.

Spells: A) With the Mystic Code's three effects, you now use one too many spell slots. Wind Blades, and Air lance do similar things, and air lance currently has a problem, so I would suggest dropping that one.

B) Wings: Please make your entire mystic code air, and alter the protection explanation not to rely on shadow. Also, the high repair speed does not make real sense, since broken magic items are not so easy to repair. Perhaps you could make them semi-permeable wind wings that require prana to maintain, rather than just prana to ‘fix’.

C) Cancelling Wind: Now that it’s readable, this is highly unlikely to work. Once a spell is finalized this can’t really happen to it on a varying rank. Cancelling any magecraft is a miracle itself, like Hercules' God Hand, but not necessarily on the same level of power as Rule Breaker exemplifies. You can put up a defence against wind magic, which will be more effective than a regular defence, but still not impenetrable. More detailed explanation on this one is needed. Perhaps you should convert it to a shield, somewhat similar to a few others on the board that absorb spells rather than decreasing the rank/being variable.

D)Pressure lance (If you decide to keep it): There is no way this can force someone to dodge it. And magi would be unable to do so anyways at the speed you have set. Which are far too high. Again, this is probably the spell I would suggest dropping.

5) Flight is not possible with current magecraft, Medea only could do it when tapping the mana from Ryuudou temple and even so, just to hover. Doesn't matter if she is using a item or is a genius, flight is out of reach to modern magecraft.

6)Dolls: See 3.

[Nina Lüceanu]

I'm really talented at writing things that seem to make no sense. Or maybe I'm just bad at expressing myself...

First of all, about flight:
5) She manifests wings. Huge and lightweight wings. What is the problem with her using them to fly?
Please give me a concrete answer here: will flight be allowed, or no?
If no, I wish to rework her spell set, as the current one was originally developed with the idea that she can fly in mind, and the balance had already crumbled long ago so taking out the wings will pretty much make her useless except for that Jovis. I have some ideas I can use but it'll be a fairly different set if I take the Wings out of the equation.

Secondly, about the Wings:
A. It's not a Mystic Code anymore. As you have suggested, I changed it to an inherited item of power. The wings have only 2 effects: one is the materialization of the wings, second is Wind Blade. If you wish to count it like that, though, it has 4 effects as it can also be used as a physical weapon, or even 5 effects since their repair can be counted as a separate spell, though there is no spell there, only the process of force feeding prana to the item over a period of time.

B. It won't work the way it's supposed to with just air. Give me a more or less concrete method to shape prana into a material object and I'll go with that. I don't want to leave it at "air magecraft forms wings" because that makes no sense at all.
The high repair speed makes sense because the item itself is not broken; the wings on her head are the instrument, and the wings on her back are just prana given shape; feeding extra prana to the aftifact will do for a makeshift substitute but that will only work once, as the instrument has its limits, too.
And there is a maintance for those wings but it is mostly taken care of by the three sacrificed circuits. I can add a time limit for the wings' use per day, or per manifestation, though. Will that work?

Also, I noticed that I mentioned little to nothing about methods. Should I rewrite the description to include the making of the item and the way it makes these effects possible? I thought that kind of information would be too "hardcore" so I concentrated on the effects but many of your questions can be reduced to a single "how does it work?".

For now, I'll leave it at that. The rest will be decided once that question about flight is answered.

Ow, well. It's been long and I have changed many things about the wings so all that doesn't matter anymore.

[Nina Lüceanu]

The time has come!
Sorry for the long wait. Would you be so kind, Ilya-chansama?

[Gilgamesh]

Considering the ridiculous amounts of changes that your profile went through, I'll just assume it's a new one.

Anyhow, an odd family indeed, with the research-hopping. First, I'd like to see how long ago the family turned to Air/Ether stuff (I'm assuming that is their 'specialty now', since they are Nina's spells).

Also, I think that you might be overselling the Luceanus' abilities with that last bit. Maybe if you were referring to young families, but 800 years of caprice is still 800 years of caprice, even if they managed to tie it up at the end.

Also, since you said you're getting rid of the Shadow Mist references, I'll just eh and wait for confirmation.

Now, Circuits. Honestly, it should be the other way around, with the bulk of the circuits in the crest, not inborn. I'd think that Doll!Nina would have to drop her count a bit.

Spells. Considering that the Wings are some sort of hair decs, how do they form a shield of wind? And can it be pierced by cumulative attacks of E-D ranks? Because God Hand (Which I assume is the inspiration) was a conceptual defense rather than a LOLTOUGH one - An A rank hit would still be A-rank, not drastically weakened.

Same thing with overclocking.

Also, can she segway into overclock if she were using the normal form? If so, how would that happen? Would she have to pay an additional 60 on top of the original 30 + maintenance?

Winds of Prohibition would also be messed with cycling resistance as well. I think it would make sense for her to have a time limit on its effect. Like, maybe if the magus waited for a few seconds, he'd be able to cast the spell, even if he didn't cast one once. As it stands, it sounds like it remains indefinitely.

Jovis Temp- blblblbl. Nothing much wrong with that, though I think that since it takes elder families most of their time to stabilize Perunic to 2 verses, I'd remove the mention of Luceanu's stabilization, considering their varied fields of study.

Hey, at least it's not a full-on bomb.

[Nina Lüceanu]

Anyhow, an odd family indeed, with the research-hopping. First, I'd like to see how long ago the family turned to Air/Ether stuff (I'm assuming that is their 'specialty now', since they are Nina's spells).

Jovis was in the Crest ever since the end of the 14th century. It's pretty much the first thing the new Crest's founder researched since his father had been squashed by a rampaging golem that went on to destroy the workshop, activate its defenses and... well, blow up the body along with the old Crest. Ether had regularly attracted the interest of the Luceanu magi, including the one mentioned above, though only two of these were consecutive generations. The applications they researched into were also different. So saying 600 years ago would be both the truth and a lie.
Nina used bits and pieces of information stored in the Crest and in the library to put together her spell list. Obviously, she went for the stuff related to air because of her good affinity. She learned Razor Gale from Petre who had studied at the Clocktower... quite some time ago.
On a side note, Raven Mist's specialty was research of immortality; excluding Shadow Mist, he didn't have much direct combat ability.


- The problematic part in the family history has been fixed.

- I kept one reference to Shadow Mist (the bounded field around the Luceanu workshop) but every mention of Nina learning and modifying it has been removed.

- The balance of circuits has been changed. Now Nina has an inborn tank of 192 prana, with the doll being slightly inferior, clocking at 160.

Spells. Considering that the Wings are some sort of hair decs, how do they form a shield of wind? And can it be pierced by cumulative attacks of E-D ranks? Because God Hand (Which I assume is the inspiration) was a conceptual defense rather than a LOLTOUGH one - An A rank hit would still be A-rank, not drastically weakened.

Same thing with overclocking.

Actually, the shield is inspired mainly by Kinuhata Saiai's (Toaru Majutsu no Index series) "Offense Armor", which comes down to manipulating hydrogen in the atmosphere into a thin but very concentrated layer around the body... Then it was balanced by taking a sneak peak at Veronica; it atually became stronger as a result.
The hair decs are just "streamliners" for the actual spell.
The shield is "self-mending" so it's able to keep a steady level of protection, unless it sustains heavy damage (the mention of 1 C- and 3 B-ranked spells). A rapid barrage will be able to break through the shield but it will be easier and cheaper to just use a stronger attack.

Also, can she segway into overclock if she were using the normal form? If so, how would that happen? Would she have to pay an additional 60 on top of the original 30 + maintenance?

She can overclock an active shield but that will require the full cost (60 prana) as she basically "overwrites" the weaker shield.

Winds of Prohibition would also be messed with cycling resistance as well. I think it would make sense for her to have a time limit on its effect. Like, maybe if the magus waited for a few seconds, he'd be able to cast the spell, even if he didn't cast one once. As it stands, it sounds like it remains indefinitely.

It's the same as LeLight's Luciano's Circuit Breaker, just with a different element. I have Ilya's permission to use the idea.
I have to mention that it doesn't force the target to waste prana, only to chant a spell over again.
Removed after the misunderstanding got cleared up.

I've added low rank metal transmutation since, frankly, I wanted that ever since I added the thrown weapons expertise. Yes, alchemy is entirely left-field but I hope that the Jack of All Trades covers that.

- The reference in Jovis was removed.

[Gilgamesh]

Alchemy kind of is, considering that it also requires that you know the base components of the material down to a fault. The Einzbern, after all, have that material scanning spell. Might I suggest Alteration instead? That way, it doesn't seem as odd (sort of like a traditional magus learning runes just because level of odd), and you get about the same result anyways.

[Nina Lüceanu]

Fixed~.

[Gilgamesh]

It only took you 5 months.

[APPROVED 1/3]

[Sola-Ui Nuada-Re Sophia-Ri]

Quite a few changes done so far, but I have no more to add.

[2/3 APPROVAL]

As a rule of thumb, try not to use Veronica as an example.

[Herakles]

*Chokes sola with berserker strength* After much time in development hell you've reached the final hurdle. Just cover these points and you will finally be able to spread your wings in Lucca little Raven.

Personality/Appearance:
First line of personality seems a bit out of place. As if it would belong in Appearance instead....unless my comprehension fails and she is an asshole. If so ignore this.

Trait Weird: Now while you may sound odd speaking in english due to vocabulary, I wonder how you fare speaking in Italian? Since this is in Italy, and everyone is speaking in Italian. (Even if we all type in English.) Might want to mention this in places where relevant such as your dictionary.

Likes/Strengths:
I see magical duels listed here but I am left wondering, "With whom?" I ask since after reading through her personal history I could find no mention of her dueling with anyone at all. Nor leaving her grandfather's estate until recently. Very recently.

Cooking-As in you like to cook, like good cooking, or just the act of cooking itself? I only ask since the (homunculus?) maid cooked for Nina her entire life.

Family history:
You should reduce the mention of,

"Helping at least 3 mages become vampires"

to just one or two. A single occurance would be understandable if what you said was the case. However if his helping others leads to multiple occurances of vampires being born you would have to be mentally retarded to shrug and let it go as a clock tower agent or member of the church. I say either one here because, this kind of research can become noticeable when villages start disappearing from newborn vampires. If you become a frequently reoccuring source of this, you will not remain in either's good books. Before you point out your notation at the bottom, you only list a single heretic having multiple contacts which let him avoid suspicion. Whereas this is a recurring case with more than just one singluar magi.

"Exactly how far his own research has gone, no one knows. Except for Nina. Probably. (If the Einzberns knew just HOW far he went in these years they'd surely assassinate him, simply not to take any risks.)"

.......What? Someone whose research is closely related to birthing dead apostles, would be assassinated by the world's foremost experts in homunculus creation, why again? This seems like a logic leap that leaves out more than a few details to me. Elaborate for me please.

Please give a name to the sorcery trait you have created here. It makes it easier to refer back to instead of saying, "That one sorcery trait," or, "the trait which must not be named".

Equipment:
Doll- You might want to remove the word "quite" entirely since while functional, isn't even close to her level. Consider that Touko can make a perfect reproduction of herself, and limbs that feel completely natural for others. The way it is written I'm beginning to suspect Nicolay is approaching the level of color with this....

Dictionary- See previous comment in likes/strengths

Raven wings- Can nina recreate these for her original self should her fake body be destroyed? If not that would be two spells gone should she attempt to return to Italy and rejoin the war.

Element:
Do you mean Wind, of which Air is a sub-element?

Expertises:
Magical combat- See previous mention about magical duels and my problem with this becomes clear.

Magic circuits:
So how many circuits does she have in the new body? You do list the Prc but leave out the actual number of circuits.

Spells:
Raven wings- So what rank are these? Neither one has a rank at present time despite being spells. I find this to be rather important since the second version takes three B rank spells to destroy. I'll comment more on these once they are ranked. I will also take issue with the second spell being a one liner for the previously mentioned reason.

Basic alteration- Can she make anything else besides throwing knives or darts when using this?

Jovis- How fast can nina cast this with her crest?

As a finishing note, I wonder about what her original body looks like since we only have the false one to look at. Nothing I would hold approval back on, but a curious aside. As always pm, cbox, or bchat are your ways of reaching me should you have questions on this.

[Nina Lüceanu]

On a point-by-point basis since I'm too lazy to quote.

- lol, moved Dat Ass to appearance, though it was also referring to a slight berserk button of hers.

- My bad. Changed to Italian in both cases.

- Duels were with Petre, Petre. And once again, Petre. He’s a sadomasochist, and I thought I'd made it clear that he’s been enjoying his “quality time” with Nina to the fullest. Raven Mist himself had tried to train her at first, once he'd noticed that Nina enjoys combat and learns faster by practicing. But as he saw Nina’s rapid progress (and as he had no time to play around with children too much) he invited Petre (who's a much more combat-oriented magus, though not as great a "technician" as Raven was) over. Sorry if all this was hidden behind too many layers of innuendo.

- She likes to cook, and she likes the act of cooking itself. After her grandpa’s death she spent much time with only the cooking homunculus. Nina was just watching her at first but later started learning cooking and liked it. I thought it was clear enough:

I learned a lot of... things... with her help. These were very unlike my lessons with grandpa...

- I threw out the second vampire. Petre is kinda an important part of her backstory, and he hasn’t been found out yet so I hope he’ll be allowed to stay. On a side note, there won’t necessarily be bloodbaths right after a magus becomes a vampire. That only happens for sure with Dead Apostles who are bound to go haywire from the impulses of True Ancestor blood. The vampires mentioned here are heretics who have found a way to prolong their existence using the lives of others via their research in magecraft.

- The Third. I suppose there should be more than a single way to attain it. And if the Einzberns, who’ve lost the Magic a millennium ago, find out someone’s actually made some, however slight progress, I think they’d want to be on the safe side. At least, they struck me as such in the canon.
Well, I removed the mention to be on the safe side. Not that it matters much; it was 90% boasting of sorts, anyway.

- Added name to the Sorcery Trait. Hope this works. If not, I'll change it to "Sinusoidal Spectra".

- Since Nicolay won’t appear here I don’t see a problem even if he was approaching the level of Color. His expertise in the field was enough to warrant Raven Mist’s “trust”, however much that word can be applied for the hard-boiled magi these two were. Raven Mist was an arrogant jerk even by magi standards, by the way.
And I removed the word “quite”.

- Recreating the Code will take much more time than this War lasts. She can recreate them but not in time to use them in the War if she chooses to ever return.

- Yes, I meant Wind. Changed to that in all relevant places.

- About Magic Circuits: I suppose math isn’t your strong point, lol. Her overall prana is 160, with a PrC of 10. The number is the same as the original body, only the quality suffered.

- On Raven Wings modes: If these were “spells” I’d have no need for the Mystic Code. I suppose the ranks would be D for normal mode and B for the “overclocked” one.
Also, I (try to) counter the issue of the second one being a one-liner with the fact that overclocking damages the Code. These kinds of Mystic Codes tend to be really effective (though a pain to create) as Nina basically has to input prana, that’s it.

- Nina’s skill in alteration is good enough for that but other shapes will require more time, as has been stated in the description. She still can’t reproduce something really complex (like a gun, for example) even if she had the time and knew the structure of the desired object so basically it’s restricted to simple shapes she’s familiar with. A fine example of using this spell as a mundane utility would be creating tableware if need be.

- About Jovis: Dunno. Beo said to remove the mention when I had it up. It was 6 lines back then but even I agreed that that was greedy once Beo pointed it out. The Lüceanu weren’t really dedicated to further development of the spell. If I had to state an exact number now, I’d say 7 lines since it’s been in the Crest for quite a while.

- Nina's appearance: The doll was based on her body so, basically, it looks close enough to the original to use the same face claim for both... except for the wings.

[Herakles]

Already covered and countered these points in bchat. Since I see this has been corrected...*Stamps dat ass before punting it into the approved section*



Welcome to Lucca, little Raven. Be careful your wings aren't clipped.