Mana Herbert (Magus) Awaiting Approval

[Mana]

Mana



"... ah...."

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NICKNAMES: Mana-tan[/color]
AGE: 23[/color]
DATE OF BIRTH: 17th of May[/color]
GENDER: Female[/color]
ALIGNMENT: Neutral Good[/color]
OCCUPATION: Healer[/color]
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Also, has her Theumaturgy Crest on the left thigh. Design is this[/color][/b][/color]

HEIGHT: 165 cm

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WEIGHT: 49 kg[/color]
EYE COLOR: red[/color]
HAIR COLOR: white/silver[/color]
PIERCINGS: -[/color]
TATTOOS: -[/color]
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES: An albino.[/color]
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• Mute
  
  • The first thing people often notice about Mana, besides her being an albino, is the fact that she never lets out more than a sigh or a grunt when faced with a conversation, preferring to use hand gestures to communicate whatever she has to say. This is, obviously enough, rather than not wanting to speak, she simply cannot speak and was in fact born mute.
  
  
• Mental age - 7
  
  • Thanks to her experiences in the Clock Tower, Mana was mentally damaged and is stuck in the mental state of a kid forever.
  
  
• Hates studying
  
  • Despite being already past her teens, Mana is still as illiterate as a kindergartener. Nor does she plan on learning how to read and write. Any attempts by people who know her to teach her letters were met with silent but vehement rejection from Mana and complete indifference from Conor. If anyone as far as mentions studying or learning near her, she immidiately backs off, her facial expression transforms to a frown and she acts as an angry cat that was backed to the wall - she starts to make low noises to show her ill will and try to hide behind Conor's back or some large object and glare at the offender.
  
  
• Naive, trusting kid
  
  • As the li'l, wee kid her mental state is, Mana is completely unaware of treachery and deceit. She takes everything she is told at face value and acts upon that, even if the person in front of her has the face of a hardened criminal or a creepy crook.
  
  
• Generous to a fault
  
  • Mana will never keep something she can give to someone else. If she sees or hears someone talking about their own hunger, she will give that person every bit of food or money she has, even if her own tummy is grumbling and demanding to be filled. Even if it's completely unreasonable, she will do it for the sake of others.
  
  
• Useful around the house
  
  • Due to her father's uselessness at housework, she is practically a professional at everything that needs to be done around the house - cleaning, cooking, sorting stuff according to place, etc...

LIKES: Conor, helping others, swimming

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DISLIKES: thunder, unfamiliar people[/color]
STRENGTHS: Although she has zero offensive strength, Mana is a great asset when she is on your side. Her healing powers are very useful and the elixirs she makes are similarly great.[/color]
WEAKNESSES: That said, having no offensive power does hurt. This obviously means that alone, she has zero chances of winning a battle, even though the chances of her fighting someone one on one are near nil.[/color][/ul][/size][/blockquote]

MY FAMILY LINE: The Herberts are a relatively young family, with around 300 years of existence. The family doesn't have a specific Sorcery Trait, but members of this family tend to be excellent healers and all have Water as their elemental affinity.

It traces it's origins to a 18th century alchemist from Britain. Family annals also suggest a Jewish link, as the last name used to be not Herbert, but Rabin in the past.

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MY HISTORY[/color]

MY GOALS: To help people.[/color]
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RANK: Would be around 3rd tier if she was sane and could actually use that Crest.[/color]
ELEMENT: Water[/color]
EXPERTISE: Healing[/color]
MAGIC CIRCUITS: 4 circuits with 30 PrC. Max mana capacity is 120 Pr[/color]
SPELLS: //[/color]

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Cost: See Below
Range: -
Effect: A spell that absorbs water molecules in the air to create a more cohesive form to use as raw spell fodder. With enough time and raw matter it is possible to create large bodies of water.

Originally created as a spell for filtration of water and raw material finding, it has recently been found to have the ability to increase its power and efficiency tenfold with merely half the prana that would be required for ten individual spells. If one liter of water would cost two prana, two liters would cost three and so on. The required prana expended thus greatly decreases, making it and incredbly efficient ability while being cheap.

As many water spells require a catalyst in the form of a body of water, it has become an essential ability in guaranteeing the new found offensive capabilities of water magi. It can also be used to purify common water by decomposing the molecules and then reforming them. The spell can also be used to manipulate small bodies of water into various shapes and easily store the production results. A skilled Magus can also decompose already established shapes such as ice and create new water out of it, thus recycling materials nearly endlessly.


Healing (Water+Ether?)
Rank: c
Cost: 30 Pr
Range: -
Effect: A healing magecraft ability. Generates a blob of ether that attaches itself to the body and replaces the hurt areas, eventually becoming a part of the body and accepting the role of the original.

Kinda like the chaos blobs that Arc used to heal Shiki's fatal wounds. Unlike the latter, doesn't heal fatal wounds since the time it takes to become functional as a part of the body is slower than chaos due to not being living matter in the first place, thus needing time to adjust the settings to that of living tissue. Takes around 5 turns(posts) to start working and needs at least a full day to be taken in as a complete part of the body.

Related to the theory behind homunculus creation and actually an ability derived from alchemy. A spell created by the first Herbert in the 18th century, when he quit being a regular alchemist and decided to try his luck at being a doctor.


Water Of Life (Water)
Rank: C
Cost: 25 Pr per 100 ml
Range: -
Effect: An elixir that Mana makes from water. Using her Sorcery Trait, she applies alchemical theories and uses prana to forcibly change the structure and components of water molecules, to create special droughts that have various effects when drunk.

This particular elixir is made with the primary purpose of healing ailments that are not outer wounds, but diseases and viral infections, as well as some of the weaker curses and other mystic effects. Most diseases that the human body can handle without external help (from colds to pneumonia and flu) can be healed overnight with a single drop, higher doses merely alleviating the symptoms earlier - the sleep is still required. It also alleviates the symptoms of serious diseases like diabetes and anemia, allowing a person to act as a healthy person would for a period of time, up to 24 hours with a single dose (100 ml).

It has a refreshing orange flavor.


Flare Syrup (Water)
Rank: B
Cost: 42 Pr per 100 ml
Range: -
Effect: Another elixir that Mana makes.

This concoction is quite similar to doping. When taken, it optimizes the body's functionality through various means, such as making it capable of using up every bit of matter that enters it, even things that couldn't be used up for fuel and were thrown away by the body earlier, or making the body absorb heat and energy from the surroundings. It also makes the muscles and organs work at around 150% of their full capacity, allowing the person's body to operate on and beyond the limits of a human body. Even if the person is already on a level when he can be considered superhuman, this drought will bring out every bit of potential his body has, allowing him to have surgeon-level precision in control over it.

Lasts around a minute per dose and can be used consecutively if needed. However, the strain from going in overdrive will cause the body to slowly deteriorate. Generally ill-advised to drink more than twice, as it will shorten the life-span and cause damage to the nerves and blood vessels, due to overuse. Muscles will generally work, but with each use, the exhaustion that remains after the effect wears off is greater and after four or five uses the muscles generally start to demand a break in the form of excruciating pain. Muscles start tearing after the tenth or so use.

Has a sweet strawberry flavor.


Holy Water (Water)
Rank: B
Cost: 120 Pr per 100 ml
Range: -
Effect: Another elixir that Mana makes.

The greatest and most potent drought that Mana can make. This potion is basically magical steroids. For the duration of ten minutes, it allows the circuits to process ten times their capacity.

But, just like with the skill Battle Continuance, it also means that once it's over, the circuits of the person are likely to be severely crippled, with damage to the nerves and brain depending on the amount of circuits(just like with Kiritsugu's bullets, higher # of circuits means higher damage).

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PLAYER'S NAME: solar[/color]
FACE CLAIM: Mikoto from Red Shift (a Kinetic Novel)[/color]
OTHER CHARACTERS: Hannibal Rider[/color]
MISC. INFORMATION: planned on making her a loli healer, but meh.[/color]
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[Mana]

Hmm, yep, I suppose this is pretty much done. Comment away!

[Aozaki Touko]

More information on your family history would be welcomed as to know from where your character is coming from, it's too short as it is now.

Healing spells works differently in the Type-Moon universe than they do at other settings, healing magic here is more akin to reverse time back to when the wound wasn't there and a magus body will automatically react to the outside prana and try to repel it, making healing to be quite difficult and not worth the prana spent in it. This is also valid to your elixirs, to some extent.

You have to add a time limit for the effect of the Flare Syrup elixir, no one can stay at 150% for a long time or they will implode from muscle damage among other things.

And Holy Water is three elixirs in one, which is not acceptable, not only that but damaged circuits cannot be healed no matter what miracle you use, period! Raising the circuits processing work to make them work faster is also like your Flare Syrup, it can permanently damage one circuits after a certain time, so it also need a time limit, raising the circuit prana capacity is not possible. Breathing and Walking is a just like your second skill, raising the processing of magic circuits to they fullest, not going over they own limits, which makes this third effect redundant.

Anyhow, you will have to pick just one or take one or more of the previous spells down in order to keep all three effects.

[Mana]

How about now?

[Aozaki Touko]

Well, there is more to the history now . . .

The rest is good, though a time example would be preferred in the Flare Syrup description rather than just saying it's short lived, as to not let any ambiguity in your syrup.

The only exception is this:

Healing (Water)
Rank: E-C
Cost: 1-50 Pr
Range: -
Effect: A healing magecraft ability. Cost depends on the severity of the wound, with anything worse than a stab in a non-vital area being beyond her aid.

Uses a burst of prana to stimulate short-termed but explosive rise in growth and regeneration on a cellular level in a very small area.

This spell does not work on anyone who have magic circuits, which is 90% of our characters here, if you still want to keep your healing spell, please be wary of that.

[Mana]

Circuits also have properties that reject external Prana. For example, any sort of spell that is used to control the target will be rejected by the circuits (but not always with success).

According to this, while the circuits do attempt to reject the prana, they don't always succeed. Number of circuits possibly has a relation to the chance of cancelling out spells.

Also, unlike the Servant skill, it can't cancel out spells that were already activated. Basically, as long as it is activated outside of the target's body, circuit resistance is nothing. I'll work on modifying this spell to fit that idea.

[Aozaki Touko]

It's not all black and white when countering prana, there are many shades of gray in between the extremes, surely outright canceling the spell is rare but diminishing it's effect is quite common when the target is someone with magic resistance, meaning that you will be spending too much prana in order to heal a magus, most likely more than what the wound is worth.

This is the main issue with healing spells.

[Mana]

You're basing this on...? The only canon mentions of circuits resisting prana that I know of is the time Caster caught Shirou in her spell and we got an explanation about circuits resisting prana, as well as the whole Bloodfort story.

Both times, the one explaining specifically said that circuit resistance DOESN'T do a thing to already-completed spells. It only rejects prana from outside sources that needs to enter the body and then activate the spell.

We also have the fuyuki wiki, which generally mentions the same thing.

Another mention of healing is in Fate/Zero, where Iris apparently healed Saber during the times between combat (or at least that was her role in the whole deal). Same with Fate/Stay Night's beginning, Saber expected Shirou to heal her after getting healed by Gae Bolg and you're talking about a being with magic resistance that outright cancels out any magecraft possibly in the modern age. This goes to suggest that such resistance is selective.

Another snack for thought is Kotomine's spiritual surgery - it's basically a form of magecraft that is used to heal, only not through the body but through the soul. If circuits reject all magical interference, then Kirei shouldn't have been able to remove some of the worms from Sakura in HF.

Actually, Araya also apparently healed Fujino's sickness prior to part 3 (thanks tvtropes.org).

...long ramble aside, we don't know enough about circuit resistance to assume it cancels out all magecraft. Makes little sense for magi to be unhealable by magecraft, with their over-dependence on it and all.

[Aozaki Touko]

I'm basing myself on the visual novel and if you say that a healing spell made to heal a wound is activated before it even touches the wound, then you really are in need to rewrite your healing spell to fit this description.

Circuit resistance is never stated to cancel the spell itself, but to hinder or cancel the effect it have on the target magus, just like how Shirou and Rin were unaffected by Medusa Blood Fort Andromeda and also how Rin got shocked by the field around the Einzbern castle.

Your description of healing spell do work on servants, never said that it wouldn't though I agree that my 90% comment could count as that, it was my mistake in a bad choice of words for that, but servants can be healed, yes, because they don't generate new prana by themselves, because they are prana constructs, so you would be time-reversing they ethereal body to the shape it had before it received the attack.

Kotomine spiritual surgery is a complete different thing, as the name itself imply, it's not healing, but a surgery to remove, in your example, the crest worm from Sakura, which the same could be done to command seals but had the risk to permanently cripple the magus, Kotomine own words in the novel.

Araya did not healed anything on Fujino, she still had her appendicitis when Ryougi fought her and was still dying because of it, he only awakened her Origin, nothing more.

Again, you are not listening, magi does not use healing magecraft exactly because it's a tough line of magecraft, too costy for what it's worth, otherwise Rin could had healed Shirou from most of his injuries during the novel, she didn't do it because she couldn't, even with a weak magus as Shirou.

It takes a EX ranking miracle like Avalon to heal people from almost all injuries at a fast rate, not instantly either.

[Mana]

...I really should lower my opinion of the open-mindedness of mods in RPing forums...

That aside, you should take another look at the spell list. For your past three posts it was already changed to fit that line of thought (forming prior to contact).

[Aozaki Touko]

It's a free world, the one we live in, anyone can think whatever they want.

And still no, the example you gave about Arcueid method of patching up is not a valid 'healing' technique since the risks of rejection, physical rejection are just like any transplant in real life, also, Arcueid used it only because it was a emergency, Shiki would die in the way if she were to take him to a hospital or to the Tohno manor, it also took a full night for Nero parts to adapt itself to Shiki's body, so 5 posts is also a small time spam for the adapting. You also lacked a upkeep cost for maintaining the spell for 5 turns.

As stated in my previous post and now in your example, actual healing is a really high level thaumaturgy that is out of reach of nowadays magi, healing of deadly wounds is possible only on servants.

Instead of having the blob replacing the damaged area, you can use it as a sterilizer, separating it from outsides interferences to prevent infection and help a little on the natural regeneration of a human, working better on a servant.

[Mana]

Didn't remember the whole 'took a whole night to assimilate' part. Reworking some.

Also, the part about it taking the whole night was due to the fact that he had lumps of meat torn apart from his body. In one of the paths(not the main Arc route) a large portion of his abdomen was bitten off by a crocodile (iirc it was a croc...) and it took several minutes to an hour (depending on how long Shiki was sleeping on Arc's lap... envious bastard) to become pretty much a part of him (despite still being black). If the description is to be believed it was about as messy as the time when Shirou took a hit from Bahsahkah's axe-club for Seiba.

[Aozaki Touko]

I can't say I remember that much about Tsukihime VN but that is not the point here, no matter how powerful a magus may be, s/he will not be able to reproduce what Arcueid or Avalon can do, this include your character as well, so the healing blob is out, period.