Guan Yu (Servant Rider)

Guan Yu. Honestly my most favourite character of "Romance of the three Kingdoms" and I really need to state that he is really quite worthy of being called God of War... although we for most obvious reasons can't give him a Divinity in this Grail War. (Pity)

I honestly thought about using him myself, but more as a Lancer than a Rider, but that is aside the point.

Let's begin.

1.) Height: You made a slight mistake here. You used the modern chi, but the chi during the Time of the Romance of the 3 Kingdoms was much lower, between 23-24,45 cm. (I checked myself because of the aforementioned chara idea.) His height would thus be more around 210-220cm.

2.) Although Red Hare is closer to Lu Bu, it was indeed tamed by Guan Yu, and that was likely that I consider him actually stronger than Lu Bu in his later life -cough- anyway. no i am not a guan yu fan., so it can be his. I like the idea of tuning it down to be weaker for Yu, but you don't need to worry that it will be gone with Lu Bu appearing as a Rider. You can only forget that it would attack Lu Bu. As freaky as it may be, it is a materialization of your legend and not a summon from the past. Two Red Hares could exist. But it makes things easier to not allow Lu Bu... who knows. I dislike unnecessary arguments about eventualities and drop this thought.

3.) His stats are honestly a bit high for a Rider. Usually you begin with a Rider basic stat and then push it up, but we already had examples of powerful Riders and they seem to be ..very variable in their set of skills and stats. I am just not fond of seeing a high Battle Continuation and a high END at the same time. END C would look more likely. The rest of the stats would be fine with me.

4.) The part and really the only part that I can't accept is your second NP, the Crescent Blade. I know that the weapon looks impressive, and I certainly don't think anyone wants this thing on their head, even without the edge. So I think it could be given passive abilities (NPs), but you were too ambitious with this weapons total output.

It was forged by a normal swordsmith, that is already one limiter and I use the long explanation because you used Excalibur as an example. I will use this sword as well to state why it would need to be weaker than Excalibur.

a 1.) Excalibur was not made by human hands, but fairies, who are in many legends renowned to produce weapons that can't be forged otherwise.

a 2.) Crescent Blade was forged by a human.

b 1.) Excalibur is known for its magical powers in countless legends

b 2.) Crescent Blade received a bit of a dragon's power. We need to also add here that the Chinese or Asian Dragons in general are often not exactly as powerful as their Western Counterpart and well... this dragon was just easily cut apart. It could not have been too much of a monster, could it? It bestowed magical attributes on the weapon, but nothing too extraordinary.

c 1.) EX Ranks eat prana. Especially when you want to use it in a direct blast as it is an instant drain rather than 'slow sapping (well faster for EX)'. Your capacity is only C Rank, which is understandable considering that you are not divine or part dragon or mystic creature yourself. Summoning of a real dragon would count as EX, but I don't think this dragon could count as EX or that a summoning would be within Guan Yu's abilities. There are only fragments of the dragon in this blade.

I am sorry about this, but no matter how much I like Guan Yu, I can't see a logical way to give him an EX for that weapon. It would be an A+ at best. You also need to think about your own limiter there. You are a Rider and not a Caster and your ability to tap leylines or absorb mana from the surroundings are zero. You completely have to rely on your master for this and to fuel such a power, disregarding your own Capacity, the master needs to be a real monster, that would exclude most if not all candidates.

A+ ...maybe A++ (although I doubt it), but definitely not an EX.

It might be better to tune this NP down and instead give him a little treat to show off more how much of a stamina tank he was, but that is your call.

Okay.

I suggest to erase the part Prana Burst in the NP description, because it is a personal skill. A weapon with a personal skill is a bit strange. It is no big deal, though. I assume that another word would be better to avoid confusion. But, if the other mods don't mind it, I have no bigger problem with it. Despite the similarity in term, a burst is a burst. There are unfortunately not too many suitable words.

But this needs to be done: Please change the stat NP to A+ according to your max NP.

As those are only cosmetic issues, that might have been overseen during the change rather than a real approval problem, the next moderator can just comment in case it was not changed before their turn.

[1/2 APPROVAL]

Added restrictions on Prana Burst ability of the weapon. It can hold ten strikes, naturally regenerates prana that could fill it up in a bit more then a day, but it's faster to get a Master's help, who can knock it down to (depending on their skill) ten or twenty hours to fill it up completely.